Reviewer: kes7 Signed
15 Feb 2010
Chapter 16: Chapter Fifteen
The problem with reviewing this chapter is that there's just so much to it. It's densely written (athough it doesn't drag at all ... it's just really full of imagery and moments worth mentioning and I can't mention them all).
I'll hit the highlights, though I wish I had the time and energy to say more.
First of all the conversation between Macet and Spirodopoulos was fantastic. Spiro's protectiveness of the men under him, and Macet's understanding and even being impressed -- that was a nice moment.
Then the shower ... you manage to always remind us in the little ways what the differences are between Cardassians and humans, and the story is richer for it. Just top quality world building. And then Spiro checking himself out in the mirror with the Cardassian armor on ... getting a small moment to think ... that was great.
And of course, we have the Vulcans. Superbly written and handled from start to finish; the reactions of everyone involved were just spot on, from the Vulcans to the Trill to the human to the Cardassians. A very moving scene, indeed.
Well done (as always).Author's Response:
Thank you SO much for reading and reviewing!! :-)
I'm glad you liked the fact that Macet was impressed! One thing I remembered from "The Wounded" was Picard's mention of his prior encounter with the Cardassians, and he approached them with shields down...and they were NOT impressed. My explanation of that is that they were not only not in a good mood, but were insulted by the fact that (to their perspective) Picard did not consider them worthy of defending against. Here, Spirodopoulos shows he DOES recognize the strength of the Cardassians...and Macet respects that. This working relationship, I think, will be very, VERY different from the one between Picard and Macet.
About the shower...just in case you're interested, that "scrubber"-looking thing is meant to scrub old microscales off, kind of the Cardassian equivalent of using a loofah for exfoliation, except it's more necessary for them.
The mirror scene...that's one I'd really been wanting to write about for a long time. There was no way seeing himself in that armor--REALLY seeing himself--wasn't going to have an impact!
Glad you liked the katra scene. I wasn't quite sure about that, about having not just the Cardassians but the human uncomfortable with it...but I have to admit, it does creep me out now that I'm older and I consider the implications.