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Real name: Rach
Member Since: 28 Jan 2009
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Bio: And this is... OH GOD WHAT IS THIS STUFF THIS SHOULD NOT BE HERE.

I'm not actually a Trekkie in the pure sense of the word, but odd things happen. I mostly write crossover crack.
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Silver Lining by Anna Amuse    Rated: K    Liked  Reviews (5
Summary:

After the events of ONOW, Scotty's working in Lunar Spaceport, not the most pleasant place in the galaxy. One day he has an unusual visitor...


Chapters: 1    Table of Contents
Categories: Original Series
Characters: Scott, Montgomery (Scotty)
Genre: General
Warnings: None
Series: Arc of the Wolf: On the Nature of Wind
Completed: Yes    Word count: 3664    Read Count: 1278
[Report This] Published: 03 Feb 2009 Updated: 03 Feb 2009
Reviewer: Teddog Signed
Date: 04 Feb 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This is a really cute, sweet and light-hearted story. I know it's supposed to go in-hand with SLWatson's fic, but I can't remember which one came first.

I love the contrasts between the two; this time with Scott, the man who isn't quite in touch with his emotions meeting with a young girl who, depending on how you look at it, may or may not have a similar problem. The kinder part of me likes to think that what she realizes that she can effect other people's emotions, she doesn't quite grasp how severe these actions can be in the context of the real world. Mostly, I'd take it as a result of immaturity.

The ending, though, seems to support the idea that while her presence effected what Scott did that day, who he was in and of himself was strong enough to make a major impression on her. She did remember him over thirty years later.

All in all, a fun read. :)

Author's Response: The chronology here is a bit weird. Steff was working on Broken Fall but paused mid-way. That's when SL came to life, and she finished BF shortly after. Yes, I believe Alika is acting without an ill intent. I know children who have this kind of power without being partly nonhumans. LOL. And I would imagine a day with Scotty would be memorable for a number of reasons for her. Not to mention that she chose him in the first place to be her guide. Thank you very much for your kind comments! I'm glad if the story didn't make you cringe too much. :-)

On the Air by Anna Amuse    Rated: K+    Liked  Reviews (10
Summary: What else happened after V'Ger. Spoilers: TMP, obviously.
Chapters: 1    Table of Contents
Categories: Original Series
Characters: Scott, Montgomery (Scotty)
Genre: General, Humor
Warnings: Adult Language
Series: None
Completed: Yes    Word count: 1639    Read Count: 1643
[Report This] Published: 14 Feb 2009 Updated: 14 Feb 2009
Reviewer: Teddog Signed
Date: 19 Feb 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This was pretty darn funny. Scotty is just completely befuddled by the overpowering Marina. He can barely get a single word in edgewise. The ending of the interview is an example of perfect comedic timing.

While Moreau is from Starfleet Media Relations, she reminds me a lot of how marketing directors attempt to strong arm their own requests into projects. Her chats with Marina remind me a lot of the phone meetings that we have at the office.

Marina, on the other hand, strikes me as a stereotypical behavior that one of my co-workers coined. He called it "Justifying the salary", meaning that the person would be annoying, aggressive, and assertive as a way to prove that they were worth the money they're being paid, rather for true personality reasons.

Because the two characters seem so close to what I've seen in the business world, it makes the events in the fic seem quite realistic.

One thing that I wanted to mention and hopefully I don't sound rude, but I'm completely fascinated with your descriptions. There's a certain foreign touch to them that's striking. This isn't a bad thing, but rather a very interesting detail from the point of view of the reader. The one line that stands out is "And looking gorgeous in that crispy uniform of hers, despite being a cow-eyed slimy sneaky bitch." It's is a mental image that grabs you, but isn't what you'd typically find in the language of someone from North America. It's very much from a point of view that's outside of my own culture. I love details like that.

Author's Response: ::laughs:: No, it's great that you tell me! This is the kind of detail I want to know, because I can't discern them for myself. I use the language, but oftentimes I don't *feel* it. Not the same way I feel mine. To me the phrase looks... normal. LOL. I think I like that it sounds unusual as long as it's grammatically sound. Sometimes people say that my language is hard to get through, now that's bad. A-typical works. ;-) As for Moreau and Marina... I worked too long a time in Moreau's position not to know exactly what rushes through her mind or, what her conversation partner must be thinking. PR people and journalists tend to love-hate each other. A lot. LOL. I'm glad if it sounded realistic. Thank you very much for the review!

The Journey by SLWalker    Rated: K    Liked  Reviews (11
Summary: A number of years ago, I had a professional column dedicated to teaching folks how to improve their writing. This is, I suppose you can say, its successor. Some articles will be dedicated to the basic mechanics of writing, and some will be dedicated to the finer points of storytelling. Current Issue: Step 14: Attaining (or Reattaining) Grace
Chapters: 3    Table of Contents
Categories: Meta, Essays and Everything Else
Characters: None
Genre: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Completed: No    Word count: 3117    Read Count: 5944
[Report This] Published: 20 Feb 2009 Updated: 27 Feb 2009
Reviewer: Teddog Signed
Date: 20 Feb 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Dialogue Mechanics

Oh my gosh, you're posting this in the format of The Journey. It's like I'm 17 again! HEEEE!

This would have been a massive help when I started out. I remember struggling with dialogue tags a bit when I started out. On a stupid note, there were classes on fiction writing at the high school and university I attended. However, they were almost always held during the last year of a program. The university one required you to be an English major too. Not really helpful for everyone else.

Author's Response: LOL! Yeah, I figured I might as well. The Journey was a great part of my life, and I miss teaching. D'you know, it was actually Bodger who was the one who fixed my dialogue screwups? ::grins:: Heck, I'm starting to feel twenty again!

Reviewer: Teddog Signed
Date: 27 Feb 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Step 14: Attaining (or Reattaining) Grace

Thank you for this.

Like we've discussed this week, I've suffered from this problem myself. The funny thing is that while I backhanded the core values of hipsters, I was blind to my own actions and how closely they were related. After all, I couldn't be a hipster! I appreciated things! And I wanted fandoms to not be a distant as they are! So, I couldn't be causing that!

It never dawned on me that the struggles I had to be happy in fandom again were tied to all of the negativity that I surrounded myself with. I'd love to say that I'm just dense at times, but I really did mess up here.

While I think your words "reattaining grace" sum it up well, I'd like to add the idea of "relearning sincerity" as well, but this might be a personal level thing. I love being a fan, but I knew that there was something missing. A large void that once was full.

To answer the questions you posed, being graceful in fandom to me means fully understanding why we are here and what is needed at this point in time. Sometimes, a clue-by-four is needed when a troll darkens our doorstep, but for me, I need to relearn that I dont' have to be defensive all the time. It's OKAY to be open. In fact, we should be more open. The only way we can tell the different between when criticism and praise are needed are to go out and use our emotions. Practice. Society seems to frown upon this, but screw them, frankly. ;)

I think the main reason as to why this is coming to a head now is that with the downturn, we're slowly realising that living in a bubble only goes so far. This has seeped deep into fandom. The biggest con in Toronto is nothing more than a giant shopping mall. Sure, I can get good deals, but there's rarely any interaction.

I think, the first step, one that I stated back at the start of the year, is to get more involved in fandom. For me, that means more PoG coverage, but also attempting to read and review fics that have been recced to me and working on that column idea. I don't want to sound self-centred, but I do think that I know a decent amount about the writing process and media in general and I've lived through things that many people only have nightmares about. I shouldn't be using this as some stupid badge to prove that I'm better, but allowing people to get a glimpse into the insights that I have. Again, it comes back to being more open.

That and leaving the snark comms helps. I'll probably still read Fandom Wank, but that's a odd case. Unlike FFR and BRPS, which just seem to bring me down, things like Crystalwank, Snapewives and Twilight fans actually make me happy to be a fan. Insanity wins over mudslinging, although given what's posted on F_W, I'm going to have to be mindful to avoid the postings of vapid anger.

Author's Response: Yeah, I think the biggest wakeup call was when I realized that I was as bad as those who were jumping my case. I wondered, really, when I got away from the core ideals of the Journey, which was always, always about guiding young authors and teaching them that 1.) They are not helpless and hopeless, 2.) They will improve with time and practice, and 3.) Being a part of the community goes well beyond just writing and posting. It means involvement, give-and-take, learning.

Leaving the snark comms has made a massive difference in how I feel now. I actually feel like MYSELF again, if that makes any sense; like this black cloud has gone away. I feel bouncy when I see a new fic, a new review, a new member join Ad Astra here.

I think you're right about us needing to learn or relearn openness and empathy. There's so much we have to offer each other.

Thanks so much for the comment, Rach.

That Which Survives by Anna Amuse    Rated: M    Liked  Reviews (8
Summary: Beauty isn't always that which survives. In fact, it rarely is. Dark AU tale.
Chapters: 1    Table of Contents
Categories: Original Series, Alternate Universes
Characters: Kirk, James T., Scott, Montgomery (Scotty), Spock
Genre: Alternate Universe, Slash, Tragedy
Warnings: Adult Language, Adult Situations, Character Death
Series: None
Completed: Yes    Word count: 7459    Read Count: 1542
[Report This] Published: 31 Mar 2009 Updated: 31 Mar 2009
Reviewer: Teddog Signed Liked
Date: 01 Apr 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

A rather fascinating character study of the mental breakdown of Kirk, one that both ties to canon AND makes sense in the context of the AU. And I'm a sucker for grim AUs, so this was quite enjoyable.

What I enjoyed the most were the decisions you made in the context of world building - we know that a major war took place that completely changed the landscape of the setting from the one in canon, but the details are left far and few between. The only solid ones are mentioned in passing by characters (from which we can tell that it was especially nasty, but we don't have a lot of information beyond that), letting the overall war fade into the background while our attention is focused on the escalating and increasingly horrific war brewing between the characters.

Good stuff.

Author's Response: Thank you. Your words mean a lot to me since your darker MU sketches fascinate me so much. ::shakes her head:: I don't know. I wanted this to be realistic. I didn't want to depress people, just to explore. And you are correct, I let the details of the war slide, since they were but a background. That's a first for me, too, writing in broad but vague context and not nailing it down with a plot. ::snorts:: Didn't feel like my field. Anyway, I'm glad if it was enjoyable. Thank you for commenting!

Rank Has No Privileges by SLWalker    Rated: K+    Liked  Reviews (8
Summary:

(2249) - What good is rank, really, when you're part of the same family? Written for the 'Orders Be Damned' challenge; way out of context, obviously.
Chapters: 1    Table of Contents
Categories: Original Series
Characters: Corrigan, Andrew (Corry), Scott, Montgomery (Scotty)
Genre: General
Warnings: None
Series: Arc of the Wolf: Below Fifty South, Arc of the Wolf
Completed: Yes    Word count: 1164    Read Count: 1182

[Report This] Published: 04 Apr 2009 Updated: 04 Apr 2009
Reviewer: Teddog Signed
Date: 04 Apr 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

A rather sweet but amusing look at Corry and Scotty in the field. Their relationship shines here, both in how they carry themselves and their dialogue. The quick, playful verbal jabs and the mutual understanding they have of each other, like in the case of Corry's mom. Corry might have a higher rank, but it's clear that family comes first, always.

I love the little details that you put into fic, like the exotic colour of the plantlife and the medical supplies. You often write the tech as being a mix of old and new and I always find it interesting what parts are close to what we have in our world now; the elastic bandage, in this case. :)

Author's Response: Thanks! It was nice to write something, even if it was a light, easy-going piece. And yeah, part of both the pain and the pleasure of writing those two is that they know each other so well that they don't have to say a lot for it to show. LOL! And, I guess that it just makes sense to me that an elastic bandage would still be pretty useful for a field medkit like that. Thank you again!

Kindness by SLWalker    Rated: K    Liked  Reviews (11
Summary: (2294) - What could have been. Maybe even what should have been. An AU of canon and AotW.
Chapters: 1    Table of Contents
Categories: Original Series, Alternate Universes
Characters: Corrigan, Andrew (Corry), Scott, Montgomery (Scotty)
Genre: General
Warnings: None
Series: Arc of the Wolf: Uncategorized, Arc of the Wolf
Completed: Yes    Word count: 1402    Read Count: 1464
[Report This] Published: 21 Jul 2009 Updated: 21 Jul 2009
Reviewer: Teddog Signed
Date: 21 Jul 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I love how you write about Maine. The little details makes me miss the place dearly.

The most interesting things that stood out were Corry and Scotty still being rebels and not really the ideal that the government was looking for (you'd think that they'd look at their files and realize what the men did in their youth) and that Scotty, even in this universe, doesn't end up marrying and having kids. On that second one, that doesn't seem so heartbreaking in this universe as it does in the normal universe. Scotty has a complete family as it stands here.

Also - "They certainly and whole-heartedly loved to make something of a mockery of the so-called enlightened modern day values creeping into society." Is that a little dig at the TNG era I see? I know we've discussed the changes of culture between TOS and TNG and how they're a little baffling. :)

Author's Response: I miss it too. Like crazy sometimes. Actually, in the original draft, he did end up in something of a permanent relationship with a woman he had dated fairly seriously in the Pike era, but I didn't figure that it would fit the narrative, so I didn't dive into it. But regardless, no, he didn't have kids. Which is a bit of a shame, but still.

And yeah, that's a bit of a dig at the TNG era. ;-) And maybe a few others, as well. Thanks for the comment!

Across the Styx by SLWalker    Rated: M    Liked  Reviews (13
Summary: 2062 - Nine years after the bombs fell, the world's a grim place. One year before Cochrane shoots the Vulcans who come in peace, ShadowKnight is trying to hold back the inevitable tide one mercy mission at a time. Or, for a more exciting summary: Arnie J plays real-life Grand Theft Auto for a good cause.
Chapters: 5    Table of Contents
Categories: Mirror Universe, Crossovers
Characters: DeVant-Smith, Nan-Cy, Rimmer, Arnold J.
Genre: Action/Adventure, Alternate Universe, General
Warnings: Adult Language
Series: None
Completed: Yes    Word count: 14262    Read Count: 747
[Report This] Published: 10 Nov 2019 Updated: 29 Nov 2019
Reviewer: Teddog Signed
Date: 30 Nov 2019 Title: Chapter 1: Outbound Ghosts

My favourite part of this chapter is the still beginning of the check-in. I love the different reactions of Arnie, Tom and The Reverend in the cab. You really capture both how claustrophobia that space is and the comradery that helps them tolerate that limited space, despite the friction between their personalities.

And that friction is earnest but not necessarily antagonistic. We can get a sense that these characters are all united in a similar goal although not always in agreement.

Author's Response: I definitely was aiming to show that they were all three professionals, I guess? Like-- they get on well enough to do their jobs, and the Reverend is a natural peacemaker, but yeah, their being united in the common goal is what keeps it from becoming a real brawl at any point. Re: the check-in and cab scene; I like the feeling of it. It's cramped, but it's kinda cozy too. Thanks for the comment!

Reviewer: Teddog Signed
Date: 30 Nov 2019 Title: Chapter 2: The Wastelands

Two passages that I think are really compelling upon reading:

"In a way, he was glad that Nance was physically confined to a box; he had a feeling that if she wasn't, she would be on the front lines trying to save people, individually or by town, and would get herself killed or captured in the process."

The reveal that I like here is that we get a sense that Arnie is an excellent judge of people and situations even if he admits to not being the most social of people. I can see this as being a mix of subconscious survival skills and conscious covert opts skills.

This pays off later in the chapter when we get the sense of how much Arnie is consciously aware of his quirks. I love that there's a reveal of self-awareness, even if it might not be fully self-aware. That leads me to wonder: how much did Logan or Enrico observe about Arnie's quirks, if both of them drove home the same themes? Or was that just general advice?

"...but most of it was antibiotics and other medications it was hard to get anywhere, even in Canada, though thanks to Forrester they were able to. If not always reliably."

I missed this during beta, but this is actually really complicated in the context of medical ethics and probably grounds for future in-universe discussion. The short version is that, in the real world, uncertain distribution of medication is often socially moral but can be considered medically unethical. This is a deep cut and admittedly informed by professional experience. For me, the mention here reflects how dire and oppressive the situation truly is if Forrester allows the uneven shipment of medication to happen.

It also addresses something that's overlooked in post-apocalyptic fiction: what about the medication distribution supply? If the world ends, how do people get maintenance medications?

Author's Response: Re: Arnie being a pretty solid judge of character/situation, I think the covert ops skills almost mitigate the survival skills. Not mitigate. But temper? Because in canon, he's constantly on edge and paranoid about other people, their motivations, their intentions. Now, all these years later, he has some slightly better filters to look through; he tends to assume good faith more, even if he's not in a hurry to make friends. LOL!

And yeah, he's not too bad at self-awareness, all given. He still likes to live in denial, but at least part of the time, he's actually aware he's in denial. XD Re: Logan and Enrico; I think Logan -- who was a good teacher -- probably read him a whole lot easier than Arnie would be comfortable with. So, giving this neurotic, anxiety-prone guy some tools for all that anxiety would have been job one; getting methodical about situations where you have time to reason is one of those tools. And Enrico was dealing with a guy who was on the run emotionally and literally, and probably was able to recognize that much? So, had the same advice.

The situation really is dire. I'm sure Johnathan would rather be able to do things on the up-and-up, regularly, but things are so lean and controlled by a conservative government that even what he manages to do is pretty extraordinary and at no small personal risk. But I love how your background informs your view on it, and I'd love to figure out what that in-universe discussion would entail. XD As to how do people get their maintenance meds? Many don't. And many die. Thanks for the really hella awesome comment!

Reviewer: Teddog Signed
Date: 30 Nov 2019 Title: Chapter 3: 'Round and Around

I like the emotional range in this chapter; it feels like that's the main focus here, as we're mostly dealing with mission set up in the actual events.

We have the discussion about how Arnie manages to go out on these missions, which focuses on his strong sense of confidence in getting the job done. However, that doesn't make him emotionally cold or short sighted. Arnie still has space for joy, anxiety and empathy. Being good at surviving in the post-apocalypse doesn't mean burning out or shutting down one's emotions. Compared to weaker stories in such a setting, this is a breath of fresh air.

Two little bits of writing that capture my imagination for things unsaid, off-screen:

"No one pounded on the door to wake him up, so Arnie figured he hadn't overslept; "

Fuck you, Tom. :P

"It wasn't nearly as successful a strategy as he wanted it to be, but maybe with practice it would be. It wasn't like he didn't have time to get good at it"

Knowing what is coming up in two hundred years, this feels ominous.

Author's Response: For someone who claims to be an anti-social bastard, he halfway fails at that. I think if there's anywhere that he's LESS self-aware, it's in his propensity to get attached to people without actually meaning to or even quite realizing it, until the chips are down in some way. Hell, the Red Dwarf crew. The original ShadowKnights. And these people.

Tom would just shrug and say, "Should have set an alarm." LOL!

Also, yeah. Heh. That foreshadowing to Mister Aloof down the road. It takes a surprising amount of bad happening -- 2072-2080 -- before he masters that to any real degree. And probably another couple decades for it to become comfortable, or comfortably numb anyway. Thanks for the comment! ^_^

Reviewer: Teddog Signed
Date: 30 Nov 2019 Title: Chapter 4: Poltergeists

I love this chapter so much. Let me count the ways.

You don't show much about Enrico and Arnie's time together (I don't think it's ever been explored deeply on screen, other than we know it happened) but the little peeks we get into that time are so vivid that I don't think we need to see more to get an idea of what it was like.

I adore the boys. They're jerks in the way teenagers can be, but charming nonetheless. You can't help but feel sad for their desperate situation and understand why Arnie, especially with his own garbage youth, would want to see something better for them. You know, aside from them reminding him of the twins.

"And Arnie was proud of her, because she had done what he could only pretend to: She'd adapted and accepted and then made something great of it."

Give it time, Arnie.

The section detailing the end of Prime Nance is a gut punch. In all of the right ways, natch, but it's a brief, emotionally intense section. I don't think this timeline's Nance has really come into her own like that. This part really drives home that I need to get off my butt and write about that transition in the 2080s.

What I love about the action scene is similar to what I mentioned about the MMI RR: it's really clear that Arnie lives for this covert ops bullshit. This isn't a cold action scene about logic dominating emotional, but one that delights in sticking it to corrupt authority. It makes me giddy to read.

Author's Response: Ah yes, the two rat bastards. LOL! I actually really adore AU!Enrico? And I think a lot of his meaner edge fell off by the time we met him in that AU, too. Dude was brave and badass and wore a coonskin hat with five tails-- wasn't it counting the five times he escaped certain death? And now we know at least part of HOW he did. Which was this other highly skilled rat bastard in his ancient history. XD

I really adore the boys too. I've got tentative plans for them which are not actually devastating. And yeah, you nailed the combination of why he'd want better for them.

Yeah, I totally did start crying when I wrote about Prime!Nance's last days. It was the gentlest kind of ending, but fricken-- still, you know?

LOL! For a guy who used to be so down on himself, he found two niches he really could inhabit like a boss: Printing and covert ops. Both of them suit his personality, though in different ways. So, he definitely has a good time doing it, and getting to stick it to a corrupt authority is the icing on the cake. Thank you! <333

Reviewer: Teddog Signed
Date: 01 Dec 2019 Title: Chapter 5: The End of the Season

Finally! The end of the story!

"Sault Ste. Marie was a guarded border crossing both ways;"

I had been wondering about The Soo. The explanation here makes sense. Ontario's north is rough but full of natural resources that one could reap with the right amount of exploitation.

I'm really interested to see what becomes of Will and Jim in the future. I suspect nothing great, given that this timeline is going to get worse before it gets any better. Better being a vague term here.

I'm particularly fond of the visuals these two lines invoke:

"Just as anticipated, the sleet had turned to snow; dawn had broken in monochrome."

"Whenever a pothole or some other disturbance pulled him back to the waking world, he'd glance around and make sure all was well, then rest his head back against the window and watch the snow fly past until he drifted again."

I enjoy the ending with the billboard, although I can't shake that it feels like a bright spot in what is going to be a rapidly darkening future. Arnie makes a pretty bold, public statement, despite that he's going to eventually withdraw in about ten years. He's also displaying a lot of hope and attachment to a country that's about to fall in the years to come. There's the immediate threat of the coming winter and that Arnie's exposure limiting what he's going to be able to do beyond the safe zones for months.

There's a lot of unsaid dread and unknowns on the horizon. I like the way that's presented, as it doesn't shy away from how grim the world is, but my heart breaks a bit for what terrible things could be after this success.

Author's Response: Yeah, I wanted to figure out how that complicated border up there would look, especially given that it didn't get nuked. I imagine it's not a very fun posting for either side of things, really.

I have plans for them, though whether I'll ever write them all out in detail is more in the air. LOL! I do not plan on killing them in some awful manner, at least.

Adding to the billboard was a bold statement! The best part being that it's not a simple statement, either; it's kinda defiant and kind of a challenge. It's also oddly a reassurance. And it's just a tiny bit hopeful, too. I think the signature was less for himself and more for the Canadians he's surrounded with, but it was the right way to sign it. Which, I think, is why I like it. It's a complicated thing and I'm not sure even he could detangle his reasoning even if he had the mental space to do it and someone he trusted enough to explain it to, but I can see most of it from this side.

We kinda know what's coming. But I do think there are good moments ahead, even if the overall arc is heading downwards. Thanks so much for the comment!