Penname: Kirok-Of-LStok [Contact]
Real name: Alan
Member Since: 10 Feb 2009
Membership status: Member
Bio: Senile old curmudgeon often found grumbling about real and imagined wrongs on various Trek sites.




Gender: male
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10x01 - "Emancipation" by lvsxy808    Rated: K      Reviews (10
Summary:

The DS9 crew are debriefed and interrogated by a group of admirals.

 

The first part of my "DS9 Season 10" project - 22 episodes in screenplay format.

 

The entire episode is available as a downloadable PDF or as an ebook


Chapters: 6    Table of Contents
Categories: Deep Space Nine
Characters: Ensemble Cast - DS9
Genre: Drama
Warnings: None
Series: DS9 Season 10
Completed: Yes    Word count: 10945    Read Count: 6106
[Report This] Published: 21 Sep 2011 Updated: 22 Sep 2011
Reviewer: Kirok-Of-LStok Signed
Date: 31 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Teaser

Script-based fan fiction is very common in web-series, which is frankly what I would call this impressive project you have here. I'm trying to get 100 posts up on TrekBBS so I can post graphics so I'll be dropping comments on there. Persevere with AdAstra though -they are more likely to comment!

K

Heghlu'meH QaQ jajvam! by Kirok-Of-LStok    Rated: M      Reviews (25
Summary: "I rather believe that time is a companion who goes with us on the journey and reminds us to cherish every moment because they'll never come again." - Cpt Jean Luc Picard

Kirok must decide between an honourable death or a living death.
Chapters: 6    Table of Contents
Categories: Mirror Universe
Characters: Ensemble Cast - Mirror
Genre: Drama
Warnings: Character Death
Series: None
Completed: No    Word count: 2855    Read Count: 5334
[Report This] Published: 19 May 2013 Updated: 24 May 2013
Reviewer: Kirok-Of-LStok Signed
Date: 23 May 2013 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2 One Helluva Ride!

This started out as being a serial called "Pirates of the Federation" - it might still happen - but this story arc marks the end of one era and the start of another. This will probably segue into something titled "The Forlorn Hope". Where does the name come from? Interesting story behind that...

Conversations with Heroes by jespah    Rated: K+      Reviews (80
Summary:

On March 19th, 2154, filmmaker Carlos Castillo interviews members of the NX-01 crew about their impressions and memories of the Xindi War.Conversations With Heroes


Chapters: 7    Table of Contents
Categories: Enterprise, Expanded Universes
Characters: Archer, Jonathan, Hayes, J., O'Day, Lili, Reed, Malcolm
Genre: Drama
Warnings: None
Series: In Between Days
Completed: Yes    Word count: 1674    Read Count: 5671
[Report This] Published: 19 May 2013 Updated: 25 May 2013
Reviewer: Kirok-Of-LStok Signed
Date: 24 May 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Introduction

Nice start. make a good audio book

Reviewer: Kirok-Of-LStok Signed
Date: 24 May 2013 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - Captain Jonathan Archer

Very "Sixty Minutes" style - you can see Archer starting off by doing this as part of his official duty to cooperate and then translating his own shame at what they did into anger and refusal to go on. Nice realism

Author's Response:

YES! You caught that! Thank you.

Reviewer: Kirok-Of-LStok Signed
Date: 24 May 2013 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - Crewman Maryam Haroun

We think of the NX-01 as being in fights all the time but this crew probably signed on mainly for the exploration. Their reaction to combat would have run the whole gamut from traumatic sorrow, as here, to hard-nosed business

Author's Response:

They are all over the place, as they should be. They aren't all the same monolithic people, of course.

Reviewer: Kirok-Of-LStok Signed
Date: 24 May 2013 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 - Ensign Charlotte Lilienne O'Day

Translating this into male or neutral terms - "This was someone's father/parent" - doesn't have the same connotations as robbing someone of their *mother*. Lifting the visor of your enemy and finding that they are a person is bad enough, that they were a parent is worse but that you have killed someone's mother? ...and yet with women in combat roles now...

Author's Response:

Exactly.

The way I name Xindi Insectoids is, I give them gender-neutral names (e. g. The One Who Fires a Weapon Very Fast) unless they've laid eggs, then the pronoun becomes a she (in canon, they are only one gender), like She Who Almost Didn't Breed in Time, or She Who Listens Well. And for this to be, immediately, known to be someone's mother, it's heartbreaking for Lili (who is not yet a mother) and hopefully it resonates more. Thank you.

Reviewer: Kirok-Of-LStok Signed
Date: 24 May 2013 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - Ensign Jennifer Crossman

What springs to mind, probably misquoted, is, "morals are the first casualty in war"

Author's Response:

Yes; Jenny isn't as traumatized, but it does not mean she's unaffected. And her unspoken concern is - what if I'm asked to do something like this again?

Reviewer: Kirok-Of-LStok Signed
Date: 24 May 2013 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 - Lieutenant Malcolm Reed

Reed voices the survivor's paradox: I feel guilty about surviving. Nicely visualised

Author's Response:

It always felt a bit random to me, why it was Hayes saving Hoshi and not Reed, and it's Reed before, with Hawkins. Trade their jobs and Hayes lives, while Reed dies. Thank you for reading!

Kirk's Island by Timelady    Rated: K      Reviews (29
Summary: The ship's aground on the shore of this uncharted desert isle.
Chapters: 4    Table of Contents
Categories: Original Series, Crossovers
Characters: None
Genre: Humor
Warnings: None
Series: None
Completed: Yes    Word count: 1158    Read Count: 3282
[Report This] Published: 19 May 2013 Updated: 25 May 2013
Reviewer: Kirok-Of-LStok Signed
Date: 23 May 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Spock as Ginger? Well that's spoiled *that* childhood fantasy! ('v') I wonder what else he has in the closet?

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Date: 23 May 2013 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Well, at least Scotty isn't using this as an opportunity for a lifestyle change! A fun read.

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Date: 23 May 2013 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

I would have expected Kirk to ask for Scotty's *biggest* coconut shell! I can foresee the potential for a serious accident if the shells make a hoofbeat clopping noise when he walks!

Childhood's End by Lil black dog    Rated: T      Reviews (56
Summary:

An answer to the Twelve Trials of Triskelion ficlet challenge.  These are small milestones from the life of Leonard McCoy, some incredibly sad, others uplifting, that helped to shape the man he became, from his career choice to his gruff, curmudgeonly exterior.

Edit 6/20/13:  I've added a new chapter, called 'Salvation,' that fits between 'Possibilities' and 'The Best of Times.'


Chapters: 9    Table of Contents
Categories: Original Series
Characters: McCoy, Leonard (Bones)
Genre: Angst, Drama, Family, Tragedy
Warnings: Adult Situations
Series: None
Completed: Yes    Word count: 4642    Read Count: 8001
[Report This] Published: 20 May 2013 Updated: 20 Jun 2013
Reviewer: Kirok-Of-LStok Signed
Date: 25 May 2013 Title: Chapter 5: Possibilities

Great imagery, clever foreshadowing

Reviewer: Kirok-Of-LStok Signed
Date: 25 May 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Forrest

Great work! Well paced and evocative

Reviewer: Kirok-Of-LStok Signed
Date: 25 May 2013 Title: Chapter 2: Second Chances

Builds a really strong picture of the situation

Reviewer: Kirok-Of-LStok Signed
Date: 25 May 2013 Title: Chapter 3: Crossroads

*Very* nice! Struck by the personal drama

Reviewer: Kirok-Of-LStok Signed
Date: 25 May 2013 Title: Chapter 4: Turning Point

You've built a really strong picture of the driving forces in McCoy's life

Looped Tape by karracaz    Rated: K    Liked  Reviews (2
Summary: Kirk is caught up in a nightmare he can't escape. Story for Halloween.
Chapters: 1    Table of Contents
Categories: Original Series
Characters: Ensemble Cast - Multiple
Genre: Drama
Warnings: None
Series: None
Completed: Yes    Word count: 2214    Read Count: 262
[Report This] Published: 01 Nov 2015 Updated: 01 Nov 2015
Reviewer: Kirok-Of-LStok Signed Liked
Date: 01 Nov 2015 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

A fun, scarey read. I liked Kirk's uncharacteristic fear and vulnerability, the slow-paced build up of atmosphere that is broken by the awakening, like someone jumping out of the dark at you.

Author's Response: Thanks, Kirok.