Reviewer: Nerys Ghemor Signed
19 Feb 2009
Chapter 6: Chapter 6
Well, I must say...I'm liking T'Kel! It's very interesting to me to see a boundary-breaching Vulcan who manages to do so while still adhering to some form of Surak's philosophy. It sure goes to show just how insular Vulcan society still is, that she would be a pariah for wanting to stay in Starfleet, and for having a slightly different take on things...
I am also VERY curious to know about this Galor that was destroyed. (Of course, MY first instinct as a "Cardassian writer" was to want to know whose ship it was, but I realize that will not be so relevant to you as it would be in my own writing.) This definitely ups the stakes even further...not only have we got a crazed serial killer with some seriously powerful transporters running around (Dominion transporters?) but we've got a serial killer running around with some VERY big guns. A Galor class may not be a match for, say, a Galazy-class ship, but it's nothing to sneeze at. To be able to take one out before it makes an escape takes a lot.
The only real drawback I'm noticing so far is your portrayal of the Pearl's crew mixture. Granted, the various Trek series are guilty of the exact same "sins," but I noticed that almost ALL of your human characters seem to be of British Isles descent. One would expect that in a world where socioeconomic disparities are no longer an issue, that the human component of the crew would be more reflective of Earth's population as a whole...one would expect to see a lot more Chinese and Indian crew, not to mention many other populous non-European nations. A lot of Latino surnames would be expected, too (among others).
I also may have missed it...but so far T'Kel is the only non-human I've seen aboard your ship. Though the series often did a poor job with crew diversity, this is somewhere where I personally feel fanfic should feel free to make up for that (unless, of course, you are writing a non-Starfleet scenario where diversity is either less likely or even politically impossible depending on where you write).
Still, I know I've been detailed in this but I want you to know that you've got me interested in what happens. I can't wait to get the next piece of this mystery!
(And hopefully see Maxwell dead. And whoever's working with him. ;-) )Author's Response:
Ch. 7 shall introduce the next alien character and mainstay of the Pearl's crew. As for diversity, it's something I work on throughout the book, but book 2 really expands the character diversity.