Date: 15 Oct 2012 04:10 Title: Chapter 1
This is a very interesting look at the ways in which jealousy and honor can both war within the same man. Good use of the 2nd person--that's a crazy way to write, but it can have its uses. One thing is does, which you utilize well, is to make it seem like the narrator is distancing himself from his own feelings and choices. Good job with a minor character and a tricky challenge!
Date: 23 Apr 2009 00:23 Title: Chapter 1
That was an interesting take on what happened during SFS...and after. Kudos for making Styles a somewhat likable character, instead of the pompous a** he was portrayed to be. A fun read, and kudos on the 2nd person style - I can only imagine how that would tie one's brain in knots. LOL!