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Reviewer: SLWalker Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Jul 2013 06:23 Title: 'A Commanding Presence'

Oh and so begins the meat and potatoes of the plot. I adore the interplay between Judy and Molly. You don't know their dispositions until you do. Harris, on the other hand, is currently giving me a skeevy vibe. I guess because the obvious answer to the mole should be Sebastian, but I totally get the vibe that it's the sexpot yeoman here.

I loved the walk through on the atmosphere and the systems of the bridge, too. That being said, if ever there was an argument for NOT having a transporter on the bridge, there it is.

Reviewer: trekfan Signed [Report This]
Date: 30 May 2013 23:36 Title: 'A Commanding Presence'

Ah, Molly and Judith. I like the chemistry between these two space veterans, the back and forth amusing. I really liked that Judith got stuck on bridge duty because she decided to go by the rules and introduce herself to the captain. Oh, the irony of getting disciplined BECAUSE you followed the rules and not the other way around. McGregor certainly runs a different kind of shape.

The little bit about examining the new security officer “thoroughly” made me laugh. Oh I like Judith and I hope to see her more as the story goes on.

We get back to the bridge where Noah is by his lonesome, seems to have the time he needs to get acquainted with things by himself, and then he discovers he’s not alone. In fact, he has some very nice looking company with Yeoman Harris. She has something about her that just magnetizes him … obviously she’s a very sexy lady (and dressed so nicely too, McGregor has to have something to do with that) but there’s something about personality that seems a bit off. I wonder what it is? What’s the thing that she’s hiding or keeping back?

The bridge tour was very in depth and descriptive. I’m a big fan of the connie refit bridge and I absolutely love that you used it here. It’s a great fit for the vessel and even has some things in it that I didn’t know about (transporters on the bridge! Why was this taken off future Starfleet ships?). Speaking of the transporters … what was beamed onto the ship? I don’t know but I get the feeling that it’s either a test from McGregor or one of the Fien pirate ships have gotten bold enough to attack the ship in dock. If they have, I hope those Fien get busted hard.

But I find that McGregor’s option is more likely.  

Reviewer: PSGarak Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Aug 2009 03:50 Title: 'A Commanding Presence'

I was afraid something would happen to poor Noah in this situation. Of course, the crew had no reason to expect they'd be ambushed at the station. I liked the tour of the bridge. You're really good at laying out spatial relations and giving a sense of location. I'm betting this has something to do with the mysterious adversary we glimpsed earlier in the story, begging the question, who is his insider?!

Author's Response:

Thought it important early on to show the ship - the captain speaks so reverently of the Kestrel that it only seemed right to treat it like a character in and of itself. Thank you for the compliment because I rather feel in real life I'm not so good at spatial relations. LOL!

And our mystery adversary and their nefarious plan is about to be revealed ... Thanks for reading and the comments too.

Reviewer: Starfire Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Aug 2009 10:19 Title: 'A Commanding Presence'

'Arsehole of the Quadrant' I love technical terms hehe.

Author's Response:

I try to ground all of my writing in thorough research. Sometimes I fear that at times I might be too technical. Hee hee.

Reviewer: Anna Amuse Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Jun 2009 13:40 Title: 'A Commanding Presence'

Cool! Leave a kid at the conn and see what happens. :D

Author's Response:

Nothing bad, I assure you. Would I lie?

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed [Report This]
Date: 18 Apr 2009 19:00 Title: 'A Commanding Presence'

Oh, crap! Here I was, lulled into a comfortable sense of Noah learning about his new assignment, and then you go ending the chapter like that. Totally awesome at catching me completely offguard.

Author's Response:

Gotta spring a few surprises!

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