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Reviewer: TemplarSora Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Aug 2013 22:33 Title: 'Problems in Engineering'

Oof, this captain is very...abrasive? I think that works. Very odd, too. I almost imagine he's either really drunk, or he just puts on the show to keep people from getting too close to him. I'm no longer sure he believes anything that he says, after the parting few paragraphs for this chapter. And it's also very apparent that he's leading by example, with his senior officers kind of mirroring the man's attitude in their respective sections (like Gardner in engineering). Interesting so far...

Reviewer: SLWalker Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Jul 2013 03:55 Title: 'Problems in Engineering'

Wait indeed. Yes, the ship is definitely something emotional. Lord, McGregor. I love Eddie's views -- still think he and Scotty would get on -- because I am at least reasonably sure that Geordi LaForge would be a whiny little snot about it all.

You get the firm impression that engineers in that century spend way too much of their time trying to pretend to be clever. Not so with Eddie. No need to pretend there. I hope Berkley gets a break, but I highly doubt it. Becca is awesome.

Reviewer: Ln X Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 May 2013 14:34 Title: 'Problems in Engineering'

I do like the frontier feel of this story, but going back to McGregor and how he interacts with the crew I wonder if the crew serve him or serve Starfleet? I know every crew is devoted to a good captain, but they all know they are part of a bigger picture. With McGregor it seems to be his own little ship based around loyalties and little favours.

At any rate it is an interesting little command structure you have developed, but again too many characters involved! You throw at least a dozen of them in the first four chapters, and each with their own POV and it becomes a real hassle going back and forth between chapters working out who is who. Plus it becomes annoying when you want to focus on one or two characters you like, and then you have to wait for several chapters until they pop up again or a scene comes with their POV.

Annoying but I'm still continuing on with this story.

Reviewer: trekfan Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Jan 2010 00:35 Title: 'Problems in Engineering'

I love McGregor. honestly, give him a comedy show for about an hour-I hear NBC is looking for a primetime show ;)

 

Nice to see Gardner too, being the grouch that he appears to be-I like grouches. Oscar was always my favorite back on the Street.



Author's Response:

I doubt the networks would risk his behaviour going out live! Ha. Glad you like him. And yes Eddie Gardner is very much a grounch. Mind you, if your captain was McGregor and he made the demands of you as the engineer like McGregor does - you'd be fairly grumpy about things too. Thanks for reading trekfan.

Reviewer: Anna Amuse Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 May 2009 17:07 Title: 'Problems in Engineering'

I gotta say, I like the feel of this ship. Meaning it's very real. Somehow, the atmosphere just gets to you, the confusion of the newbies, the wicked (but not unkind) humor of the oldies. LOL. It's got all kinds of promises. ;-)

Author's Response:

Aw mega thanks Anna. Very much what I was trying to go for. Good to know I achieved it with at least one reader. And again thank you so much for reading.

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed [Report This]
Date: 02 Apr 2009 20:16 Title: 'Problems in Engineering'

Still need to go back and add in those commas you were worried about. ;-) Trust me, they'll help. I kinda have to wonder what your Chief would think of my Chief, who was both a junkyard dog and an Academy trained engineer. ::laughs:: But so far, as wonderfully rough as your Kestrel crew is, it seems almost like as much a hostile environment onboard as the areas they go patrolling.

All that being said, they sure are an interesting lot.

As for the Shore Patrol, not much as been written about 'em. And, really, only one of them gets any real look-in -- Abigail Hanson, who's Corry's main love-interest. She's tough, she's smart and she has some of the foulest language in the Federation. Though, admittedly, I haven't shown much of that yet. ;-)

Author's Response:

Thanks Steff,

First, I'll go back and check over those commas. Pesky things, they like to run away on me. Second, I'll have to check out your Abigail Hanson. She sounds like fun.

As for my Engineer and yours? I'm pretty sure Scotty's smarts would shut Eddie up, quick sharp. ;) Remember too, that Eddie had to swallow his pride and do whatever was required to get the pips on his collar. So somewhere's along the line he had to face the Academy. Obviously, his experiences there probably did little to dissuade him of his perception of the paper trained Academy brats.

And yes, so far, the onboard environment seems a little hostile but I was trying to veer from the utopian wonderfully friendly and supportive characterisations of shipboard life I've fallen into in the past. Much like any staff, take for example an office, has its pecking order and office politics, I figured a starship crew would have similar issues to contend with. More so, because they have to live side by side one another too.

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