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Reviewer: SLWalker Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jul 2013 09:15 Title: Executive Decisions

This is a terrible place to leave a reader, I'll have you know. So, I expect that next chapter. Within a week.

All that being said, it's an engaging story. The whole thing, from beginning to end; once you have some grasp of the characters, the rest is like candy. Every one of them comes across as real and realistic, with varying levels of talents and damage, and a very real sense of community and family. The new ensigns settled in so slowly and yet so smoothly that you hardly realized they were part of the crew until they were. You showed us McGregor in varying states of insane, flippant and heartfelt. Molly's a winner, damage and all, and my heart aches for T'Vel.

The whole crew, really. All of them. They are miscreants compared to Starfleet, but not compared to a cross section of the real world we live in. Which is why I've said it's like you're flipping a giant bird (see what I did there?) at the canon materials. Because you make it real, and traumatic, and breathtaking. Detailed. The millions of little details are awe inspiring.

So, Kev, why this Hell is this story sitting here? Get to work, man. Show me where this goes.

Reviewer: trekfan Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Jun 2013 19:58 Title: Executive Decisions

Oh, Molly. This extended scene with her in her office, remembering fondly the desk and hashing things out with Noah is particularly nice. I enjoyed seeing her get an extended look and her conversation with Noah was at once revealing and a bit sad, on both ends. I had been convinced that Noah was finally coming to accept his posting to the ship. The way he performed under pressure, the compliments he got from the captain, the way the rest of the crew seems to be taking to him … I thought he was finally beginning to understand. I mean, Judith gave him a very moving story to hammer home the point that the Border Dogs may do things differently and may be seen as the poor cousins of Starfleet, but they’re the type who gets things done. They’re heroes but just not to all the Federation, just those frontier worlds.

But it seems Noah is deadset on being part of the main fleet and getting out of the Border Dogs. His opinions were frank and honest, but were saddening. Molly’s thoughts on that matter also made me feel bad for her. Here she is, trying to make up for a past sin, and unfortunately Noah doesn’t want the kindness. She called in a lot of favors to get him there but in doing so stuck him in a place he didn’t want to be … her act ultimately for naught it seems.

McGregor’s plan to blow up Thads ship, fake his death, and then hopefully find his kin in the classic McGregor boldness that we’ve come to expect. But Molly has her doubts and I do as well … it’s not like T’Hos is gonna play nice once Thad is dead. The guy is the type not to do that.

And so we have reached the last chapter, MF. There is no more after this, which is criminal sir, you must write more! I need to know what happens here. Who’s the mole? Are they brainwashed? Will Jex get together with anyone? Is McGregor certifiably insane or merely crazed? Is Stan’s vision of death, destruction, suffering, and pain going to come to pass? Will the Kestrel crew be able to trust one another again? Will T’Hos find them before McGregor finds him?

The questions left here leave me wanting for more, and I desperately want you to deliver. Summer’s here, MF, this is your time to shine!

I look forward to more, whenever it comes. This was a very enjoyable experience.

Ch. 33 still is the best of the bunch though. Just … damn.

That is all.


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