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Reviewer: SLWalker Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jul 2013 02:29 Title: 'Below Par'

McGregor golfing on his own hull is also a hole in one. I got a kick, too, out of the level of description you gave the EV gear. The TOS stuff was awful. And I always liked the Enterprise design myself. As for Sebastian's answer, this should be interesting.

And Eddie getting interrupted is such a trip, especially the how.

Reviewer: trekfan Signed [Report This]
Date: 01 Jun 2013 05:12 Title: 'Below Par'

Ah, Sebastian. He might be the next grouch onboard next to Gardener. Every time that barrier of his breaks down, just for a fraction of a second, you see a decent guy there, someone who can be engaging and have a sense of humor, but he’s so serious so often it often comes off as if he’s being a stubborn mule, which he is about most things.

But, in classic McGregor fashion, Sebastian is broken down by the eccentric nature of McGregor. The bit about Molly’s EVA suit having a third arm for bitch slapping people was hilarious and I really appreciated that. The way you described the two of them on the hull, walking amongst the stars, was very First Contact to me. I was almost waiting for Lt. Hawk to show up and get assimilated (being a helmsman for Picard is dangerous work, FYI … they have to have the highest mortality rate in all of Starfleet!).

When they finally got to their destination, McGregor sit up his golf game and let it rip. More than that, the purpose of the affair was not to play golf or bug Gardener (hey, good causes both) but to really get to the reason why Sebastian is still in Starfleet. Why he’s there to begin with. Because he could have packed it in and instead he’s here, but a massive sourpuss and … well, he needs to drop it and warm up.

Inside. It’s cold out on the hull.  

Reviewer: Starfire Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 17 Mar 2010 07:53 Title: 'Below Par'

What a wonderfully mad chapter.

Was it wrong of me to think 'Uh oh.' what reading McGregor's holding a meeting in a room with an airlock?

I don't know what's made me laugh more, the fact he's dragged the poor guy out onto the hull to hold an interview or the fact he's decided to go play a little pitch and putt while they're out there.

Author's Response:

No, I don't think it was wrong of you to think 'Uh oh'. I don't think I'd like to share a room with McGregor that has an airlock in it! Glad it was wonderfully mad and made you laugh. Yes, he does things in his own wee way


Reviewer: kes7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2010 01:38 Title: 'Below Par'

I can never quite decide if McGregor is a crazy genius or just plain crazy. I suppose he's a little (or a lot) of both. But I really liked this chapter for the zany, lighthearted, yet no-BS way in which this captain is reaching out to and assessing his officer.

Another thing I loved was the description of the space walk. Made me feel like a kid again -- wanting to be an astronaut when I grow up so I can see the stars without a big ol' layer of atmosphere and light pollution in between them and me. Hearing my own breath (as long as I remember the breathing bit!) in my EV suit and the sounds of my crewmates on the comm. ... and nothing else. Vacuum. Silence. Awesomeness. You did a great job describing all that.

I do have to say I knew it was golf clubs in that bag the moment he hefted it onto his shoulder in the airlock area -- the title of this chapter sort of gave it away. But after that, I was totally looking forward to the "golf in space" moment, and you did not disappoint! I was expecting a hole-in-one to the stars, but smacking the window was a fun surprise. Hehe. Funny McGregor.

And of course, that last line, the question he asks Sebastian -- Why, indeed? I hope I don't have to wait long to find out! Great chapter.

Author's Response:

Glad not to dissapoint. Yup, the golf clubs bag was a little obvious but not so much for our friend Sebastian. He has a few more surprises coming his way. And of course, not much of a surprise but we get to find out in the next chapter a little of the why he joined Starfleet.

Happy - no delighted - that you enjoyed the space walk. Was trying to get the balance right between moving them on and describing the little jaunt. I had so wanted to do a scene on the hull during the ship's tour way back at the start so this was my chance to redress that. I guess that will have to wait for the Director's Cut! Hee hee.

And you may have pegged it correct when you talk of McGregor being crazy genius and a bit plain crazy.

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