Date: 25 Jul 2013 07:15 Title: 'A Medical History'
Aww! I don't know who's more adorable, baby Judy or slightly-less-baby McGregor. I love ghe backstory here. When I originally went through, it seemed an illtimed digression from the action. But with age comes wisdom, and now I appreciate it. Another of those fine, aged wine moments.
Date: 01 Jun 2013 02:25 Title: 'A Medical History'
Wow, MF. Just … god, what a gutwrenching chapter. I didn’t expect this here, I was not expecting this type of chapter or my reaction to it. It hurt to read, I had to pause a few times, take off my glasses, and wipe away the tears. I couldn’t, for the life of me, stop from feeling so emotionally wrecked as I read this chapter. Spoke to me on a lot of levels, but I’m not quite composed at the moment so forgive the randomness of the order and the thoughts.
Firstly, the young Judith Monroe or Judy as she was known here. My goodness, she was such a sweet and inquisitive child, a child who loved to learn and wanted some day to be a teacher. You captured that idealism, that child-like innocence beautifully here and that’s why it was so damned heartbreaking to see that shattered when that shuttle went through her house.
The scene was visceral, it hurt like hell, and watching Judy just make her way through the ruins of her home … man. You didn’t paint the scene here you made it a motion picture with narration of the best kind. I had to stop to wipe my eyes during her final moments with her mother, as her father sat there and cradled the dying and broken woman. You really played that scene just right, just long enough to make it hurt but you didn’t drag it out.
The next part, with her father taking his wife and her mother and his daughter, loading them all into the jeep, and heading off for the mountains preaching that Starfleet was coming … it seemed desperate, maybe even the moves of a man in shock, but what else could he do. He had to keep what was left of his family alive and he damn well did but getting them up to that mountain. The heated words he had with the other angry men, the other colonists who managed to survive the initial slaughter, were absolutely spot on. He was right to point out that revenge would serve no purpose but a death wish … and then to have poor Judy there to hear that, to hear all of it, was tough.
But having the Nausicans show up and just gut the place was even more shocking and the chase down the mountain side was pulse pounding, heart racing stuff and I wasn’t sure what was going to happen … but when they finally got chased down, knocked down, I thought this was it for Judy and her father. At least her father was going to die and that thoughts saddened me as her father just laid there, ready to be killed. What was she going to do with no parents? Was her grandmother still alive?
But then, with things at their worst, you bring in McGregor and Rah/Fang and they save the day in classic fashion. It was brilliant timing and it made me choked up to see them ride over the hill and save the day. This is why Judy is serving in the Border Dogs. This is why she’s there. McGregor and co. came to her rescue and she’s been inspired by it ever since. A beautiful peace that spoke to me and a few of my characters (noticeably Daren, who was absolutely the cause of my emotionalism this chapter).
Well done, sir. I need a minute to breathe before I start the next chapter, but damn, MF, this was a fine piece. A damned fine piece. And as much as you want to knock your writing, you shouldn’t when this is in you … you hit on something here MF and that takes skill.
This is my favorite chapter so far. I don’t know if it can be dethroned.
Date: 01 Dec 2009 08:15 Title: 'A Medical History'
You give such a wonderful perspective of what the Border Patrol really means and does with this flashback. It's one thing to think of them pursuing pirates and smugglers through space, but it hits a lot closer to home when one is confronted with colonies such as this, eking out an existence and mostly defenseless. Little wonder that Judy decided to take the course she took in life, and it's also interesting to see just how long McGregor and Rah have been at this together. I'm not always a fan of flashbacks, but you handled this one very well.
Well I had to set out what was different to the Border Patrol to the normal Fleeters. And whilst the Fleeters like the Enterprise crews do save the day and come charging in - sometimes it is on a larger scale than what our little Kestrel crew must do. But the Border Patrol takes the protection of its charges very seriously. And yes McGregor and Rah have been at this a while ... that'll have to be explained somehow ... One thing is that sometimes, when you're at something for so long, you do tend to develop some bad habits. Hee hee.
Date: 06 Aug 2009 15:12 Title: 'A Medical History'
McGregor and Rah saved Judy and her father from the Nausicaan attack that wrecked her hitherto happy upbringing.
That's one hell of a way of linking up the crew m'dear :)
Ah yes. Things have been alluded to but this reveals a little more about McGregor and Rah's past past - if you get what I mean? ;)
Date: 02 Aug 2009 01:34 Title: 'A Medical History'
And once again the Border Service comes to the rescue. They might be a little late but they get there for the fun stuff.
Fighting scenes are always fun to read in my opinion and this is a good one. A massive Kzinti taking on Nausicaans of equal size, very cool. Bout time those raiders got what was coming to them.
Was funny reading McGregor hitting the Nausicaan with the umbrella. Might not be the most effective weapon but it certainly was a nice distraction.
Was a nice look into the Doctors childhood. A frontier girl who ended up joining the very starship that saved her and her fathers lives. Only in Starfleet do things like that happen.
Keep it up Miranda. Im hooked and want to see more, especially stuff with the Kzniti. Feliniods are so under represented in Star Trek its about time they got their 15 minutes of fame.
Thanks loads Kraylose. Glad you're hooked - now I'm upping the price (lol)! Haven't had much time so far devoted to our favourite friend. I've been keeping his story back but his time in the sun is coming. Mind he might not like being in the spotlight much! Thanks for reading and the review.