Date: 27 May 2014 23:17 Title: Another Man's Treasure.
I have only a very summary knowledge of this Mirror Scotty, but the story itself stands nicely on its own. You did a good job setting up the character - 16, strong, born and lives in space - in a very short snippet, giving us the readers everything we need to know as we follow Scotty through this junkyard. You did a good job of capturing his voice - it is easy to imagine a young, though slightly different, James Doohan in the role, as he climbs into the junkyard and begins to look through all of the things that have been left behind.
I especially enjoyed the theme that ran through the piece about the difference between space and ground - how Scotty struggles to adjust to the gravity, something that is omnipresent until right at the end when he kind of pushes all of that aside in his haste to get out of the junkyard. I also liked how you created a distinct sense of wrongness about this world - it is easy to imagine that this is not in the Trekverse we know but rather in the Mirrorverse. There is an omnipresent otherness that comes across nicely through very small, subtle cues: the junkyard itself, the signs announcing brute force and dogs, Scotty's fear as he runs. All of them add up to a world that is removed from the one the 'real' Scotty probably grew up in.
You did a good job of creating the fulcrum that leads to the story's end as Scotty brings the junk crashing down around him. The race to get out was extremely well written, creating a real sense of tension and fear, especially as from the note we knew where it was heading.
I was a little let down at the relative mundane way he gets the scar - though that may have been your intention - and there were a couple of spelling mistakes or nits throughout. Overall, though, this was a well written, nicely paced short piece that shows a good grasp of this character. Well done!
Date: 12 Sep 2013 08:42 Title: Another Man's Treasure.
That was pretty good, definitely a nice addition to Steff's universe. It's odd a) seeing a young Scotty and b) seeing a young Scotty in this universe, just knowing in the end who this kid winds up becoming. It's like watching the prequel Star Wars and knowing the kid is going to be Darth Vader (though, thankfully, without Jar Jar). Nice and short, though I honestly sat through the whole story waiting...and waiting...and waiting for him to get hurt somehow and then...it was right there at the ending. I should have seen that coming, lol. Really fun read, and definitely a very...interesting foreshadowing of Scott's future life with the tricorder. Maybe I'm looking too deep, but the idea to throw something away when it's no longer useful (promotion by assassination) along with Scotty's constant struggle to remain useful for Starfleet so that he'll stay alive and continue his brutal work...and interesting way to introduce him and us to that mindset. Fun read, though!
Date: 09 Sep 2013 03:51 Title: Another Man's Treasure.
I love this compact little story (I don't believe I've read anything of yours before; this was a lovely surprise!). Like any true engineer, Scotty is a tinkerer at heart. Like any true rebel, he's a scrounger, too. Well done!
Date: 21 Oct 2009 11:51 Title: Another Man's Treasure.
Very nice! Wonderfully descriptive, tense, yet with a sense of wonder at the wastage on display in such a place for someone accustomed to such austerity. This Scott is a wiley sort, fortunately for him.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! This Scott is a younger version of the Scott from SLWatson's Mirror arc, before he ended up inside the Empire. I felt he had to be a smart survivor at this point in time in order to set the groundwork for what would come much later.
Date: 21 Oct 2009 05:04 Title: Another Man's Treasure.
I liked this. I enjoyed the sense of immediacy and of being immersed in a moment. The setting is well realized, as is the urgency of the escape. That part was also very realistic. When the adrenaline is running like that, it's much later before you really feel any pain. Nicely done!
Author's Response: Thanks! One of my worries it that the urgency of the escape comes across as too quick and blunt. I'm glad that it feels real and in the moment, which are some of the notes I was hoping to hit. :D
Date: 09 Apr 2009 16:43 Title: Another Man's Treasure.
Wonderfully atmospheric or moody. I was there in the junkyard with Scotty. Neat little touches that conveyed what needed to be conveyed. It's almost simplicity in itself but masterful use of language and tone. I don't how you managed to be so effective and affecting with such choice words. Bravo.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad that the atmosphere comes through as sharply as it does. I get worried that I'm missing the point with settling and mood. ::Chuckles:: When it comes to word choice, I'll have to admit that I'm not really sure how I pull that off. It just... sorta happens. :)
Date: 18 Feb 2009 23:02 Title: Another Man's Treasure.
I admired this piece the first time I read it, when I knew nothing yet of the Mirror Arc storyline. I got caught up in the potent dark imagery. And I thought that this was some way of explaining his scar.
Now, as I was re-reading this, I kept asking myself what I am doing in this business. ;-) The attention to every little detail is astonishing, especially as it doesn't come in an overly descriptive kind of way. Rather it's several well-chosen, well-balanced words trigger an intuitive image. The history of things. The scenery. Amazing.
And of course, the terrific characterization. He has so much of Scotty here, and yet so much he doesn't. The passion they share at this point, the sympathy for broken things and the conviction that nothing was unsalvageable. Not without trying to fix it first. Scott's wonder at having struck gold is moving. To think that he could still get lost in his fascination of this 'treasury'... And yet, always alert, always reacts with light speed to danger. So *him.*
This is one mesmerizing story. Dark. But no that dark. Yet.
Author's Response: Aw, don't sell yourself short. The details in this story are based on what would be an ideal boy's adventure story - a dark setting, a cautious but curious male lead and a strong undertone of the unknown. I wanted to work with that because it's such a sharp contrast to the settings in the Mirror Arc later one; there's a sense of youthful innocence in place here. Thanks for the review! This is one of my favorite fics, so I love to hear what people think about it.
Date: 02 Feb 2009 21:39 Title: Another Man's Treasure.
I can't really heap enough love on this, even though it was written awhile ago. The details in it make it, as well as the heart-pounding ending. Your attention to those little things that make you actually feel what it's like to be in a character's skin just amazes me; I'm really honored that you went and wrote this for my mirror arc.
Author's Response: I still like this fic and it's probably my favourite out of the MU I've written. It also started a loosely linked series of stories that reference "adventure stories for boys", which is why it's heavy on the details that complete the picture. Gravity and Balancing the Void have this going on as well. I'm glad you still enjoy this - I had a blast writing it.