Date: 10 Jul 2009 19:55 Title: Permission
Again the gritty reality of Bones' situation and the apt [horrible] description of the medical bay as a cut-throat triage and his reflection of the events and especially upon seeing Kirk and Spock arrive in sickbay. Great stuff.
Love too how Kirk is portrayed and as to be expected won't leave the ship. Spock too unwavering in being at Kirk's side, nevermind the shared telepathy now present. Intriguing and gripping.
Date: 10 Jul 2009 19:49 Title: Everything
She’s given everything she had
Oh that sounds really ominous in the past tense. Even Scotty seems to have given up the ghost on the situation and what he and the Entreprise can do. That cannot be a good thing!
Great stuff again. McCoy battling against the odds is gritty stuff and his swallowing his sarcasm an equal sign of how bad things are.
Love the way Spock asks the questions Kirk wants to ask but cannot.
Date: 10 Jul 2009 19:42 Title: Four whispers and a scream
Damned ballsy move by Spock. Love the internal battle raging in his head: 'There is no pain' and his body and Kirk's screaming blue murder that there is!
And Scotty cursing! Who'd have thought it? Great stuff and of course what the hell about that little cliffhanger. 'Holy mother of... collison alert!' Fab line! Just loved that. That and the succinct Bullshit.
Date: 24 May 2009 14:47 Title: And flickering lights
Phew. This is relentless. The carnage, the pain, the injuries, the shocking words that escape from Scotty's lips: 'There is no bridge' My Gosh this is just terrific. The different settings and change of scenes between are very effective and the total is a picture of mayhem and trauma. Excellent sense of the chaos and horror of this event. Kudos. Kudos.
Date: 24 May 2009 14:42 Title: Whispers
My God. That was a devastating scene there. Normally we don't see such dire scenes in the TOS episodes so that makes this all the more shocking and horrifying. really well written carnage that keeps up the disorientation from the previous but sets up this gory scene perfectly. Nicely paced and well written, it hooks the reader in and refuses to let go.
Date: 24 May 2009 14:37 Title: Moon
Talk about disorientating your readers. That was a clever way to follow up the traumatic events of the opener. Can just imagine Kirk laid out concussed or the like as McCoy scrambles to save lives and no doubt berat Jim later but endangering them all in the first place.
Date: 24 May 2009 14:34 Title: It went bang
Ow wow. That was a dramatic opener, yet punctuated with spikes of humour and the trusted beliefs of Kirk in his crew to get him out of there. This lives up to the title. Things have certainly gone with a bang. Now it's a question of what caused it. Like Kirk, I am of the firm belief that they will make it out of it somehow, someway. Not just so sure how badly they'll fare mind. An interesting set up. Neat dialogue, sparingly used here, but every mouthful rings true to me. Loved Scotty's exaspperation and his retort to Kirk. LOL!
Date: 20 May 2009 19:20 Title: It went bang
Wow! Those last two chapters were powerful! Again, the day we all fear, and it's playing to each crewmember's own private hell. This story is riveting, and heartwrenching, watching how the aftermath of that terrible event is affecting all of them, and yet in spite of that they continue to function as efficiently as we would expect them to.
Not sure where this is headed, but if it's going to what seems to be the inevitable, it's gonna be sheer anguish to read. You are very good at capturing the intensity of the moment and evoking all kinds of emotional responses in your readers (well, this one at least ;-) ).
Waiting for the next chapter with bated breath and gnawed-off fingernails!
Date: 17 Apr 2009 19:31 Title: Everything
Well, the news just keeps getting better! Maybe you could have sickbay catch fire next so the crew begins to feel like things are going badly for them. (LOL)
Author's Response: Would I be that mean? ::evil grin:: Though that is an interesting idea ::cackles:: Nutty (nasty to her characters)
Date: 10 Apr 2009 17:27 Title: Everything
Oh, ouch! Intense stuff, but at least it seems to be levelling off. The clean-up (or evacuation) is gonna be something else, though. Crikies. Good stuff, Nutty, as always!
Author's Response: I think I'll let them have a breather now :D And yes, the clean up will begin...or will it...? ::grin:: Thanks for all your support, hon. Nutty (hoping to do some more this weekend)
Date: 08 Apr 2009 01:46 Title: Four whispers and a scream
Nooooooo!Nooo, no, no, nooo!
Go to write right now!
Pleeeease!:::begging, demanding, pouting, all at the same time::::
And RL and the Muses be damned!
PS The little lady is a delightful excuse...RL is not.
PSS Marques de Sade is an amateur...
Author's Response: LOL :D I will. I did write some more last week and hopefully I'll get some more done this week. ::offers you chocolate:: Thanks for reading and commenting. Nutty (thinking up some more cliffhangers)
Date: 30 Mar 2009 20:14 Title: Four whispers and a scream
Collision alert? WTF? Great so far-I want more, please. This just became my first "favorite"-congrats, I think...
Author's Response: The destruction does not stop here :D I'm so glad you've been enjoying this ride. It's great fun to write and I'm happy to hear that it is to read as well. Nutty (who must write some more)
Date: 30 Mar 2009 20:05 Title: Moon
I've had a concussion-this one reads like a doozy! Great flow of thought on the part of Kirk!
Author's Response: Yeah, I've had a concussion too and the brain just weirds out on you...though not quite like Jimmy's did ::evil grin:: Thanks for your kind words. Nutty (who fell off her bike as a teenager and this is the result :D)
Date: 30 Mar 2009 20:03 Title: It went bang
There's a cliffhanger challenge for March on TrekBBS-you could easily enter this part. I'm going to read more-this is good.
Author's Response: Oooh, thanks for pointing that out. I've thrown it up there. I've never been to Trek BBS so it was an interesting visit. And thanks for reading and posting feedback. Nutty (insane, but with style)