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Reviewer: CeJay Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2015 01:37 Title: Chapter Two

For a moment there I figured that being back on a starship would do Krystine some good, especially when surrounded by old friends and former colleagues. But then again is any admiral who used to be a starship captain ever truly comfortable being nothing more than a passenger on a starship? Of course Krystine has some other demons haunting her as well.

And now it sounds as if Betazed is a real political hot potato. No wonder Colonel Andrus is wound up so tight, this one hits close to home and it seems to me this mission may seriously test his loyalties. Especially if Leone can't get her head on straight.

Reviewer: CeJay Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Jan 2015 01:31 Title: Chapter One

Oh boy, is there anything worse than having your own mother suddenly come out of retirement only to become your de facto boss? Alright, so it might not be quite that straight forward either but then of course this is one complicated family anyway.

While the matriarch returns to the lime light, her daughter is reassigned. Something tells me that Krystine is in no state to carry out an assignment of high political importance. So that's probably not going to go well.

And then there is the youngster of the family who has his own troubles with his kind-of but not really girlfriend who has only just learned of a falsehood he has been perpetrated for years. It might be innocent enough but I can kinda see why she would be a little peed of about it.

It's tough being a Leone.

Reviewer: trekfan Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jan 2015 19:54 Title: Chapter Two

Some sweet moments here between Abbie and her husband, and some bitter nostalgic ones between Leone and the colonel. Seeing her subordinates fly away and take their own posts and grow, all while she seems stuck at HQ, you can really feel how much she's hurting. Otex is right, she needs to get her head straight to take on this mission, and maybe she needs to take some time off to grieve.

Then again, maybe getting the stars back under her feet is what the doctor ordered. Really liked the depth that was presented here. Well done.

Reviewer: trekfan Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jan 2015 19:36 Title: Chapter One

Man, that chapter wasn't lacking in fun. The family relations continue to be a source of interesting developments, as it seems each member of the clan has something going on. Enjoyed the subtle undertones between them all.

But it seems that Leone's going to be taking on a big task with Betazed. I wonder if she'll get a ship? I was betting they were going to let her roam about like the other Admiral's in the series.

Reviewer: Gatekeeper Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jan 2015 05:01 Title: Prologue

I really like the wedding venue. It's always fun to imagine what certain ceremonies and other things will be like in the future.

You've given us a wealth of characters to get to know here, and I was especially interested in Govan, the Otex brother who carries a symbiont. I like Abbie's sarcasm, and found the dialogue and description of the three mothers and daughters who were high ranking fascinating.

I won't pretend I know a lot about the time period, as I am mostly a TOS or TNG girl, but I look forward to reading more and getting to know these characters better. I am interested to see where this story is heading.

Reviewer: jespah Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Jan 2015 04:57 Title: Prologue

Ah, lots to get across in a short amount of space. A prologue works well here - and the wedding background is irresistible.

Reviewer: Lil black dog Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Jan 2015 07:08 Title: Chapter One

This again was a nice bit of scene-setting and character building.  I may not be as intimately familiar with these characters as some, but I'm getting to know them.  The tension between Krystine and Angeline was palpable, as was the awkward exchange between Dom and Teelis.  Lots more to both relationships, I'm sure.

Just want to give a shout out here to the accurate portrayal of how things work in the service, and in the Navy specifically.  As a retired LCDR in the reserves, I appreciate the nods to promotion ceremonies and minimum time in rank.  An interesting tradition though, at least when I was in, was that you got your increase in rank insignia from a friend or fellow officer who had been promoted beyond that rank, and therefore no longer had need of those lower insignias.  I can nremember passing along my old 'bars' to more junior colleagues, and presiding over several swearing in ceremonies, both for enlisted and more junior officers.

But I digress.  It'll be interesting to see where these multi generations of Leones wind up, and if any will be able to step out of the shadow of their more famous, and higher-ranking parents and earn merits in their own right.  It already seems that many of their colleagues take them at face value, even if they themselves don't.

Reviewer: Lil black dog Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Jan 2015 06:31 Title: Prologue

I must admit to being strictly a TOS girl, but nevertheless I found this intriguing.  Well written, the dialogue flowed easily and comfortably.  I like the choice of a wedding as a venue to introduce us to these characters, and there were quite a few who grabbed my attention, from the dashing Otex brothers to the Leone famiily dynamic to the pregnant Abbie, trying to recruit officers in this setting and using her pregnancy as an excuse for such behavior.

Makes me curious to see further interactions between these characters, and how these different and diffuse lives will mesh within this story.

Reviewer: trekfan Signed [Report This]
Date: 23 Jan 2015 20:59 Title: Prologue

Ah, a wedding. Personal note, totally grinned at the location of "Yarborough Family Vineyards." I actually have an OC family line with that same last name, so it was cool to see it here even if it's completely unrelated to anything else.


As for the prologue itself, there's quite a few things going on here that I liked. From the ease with which the people talked (and didn't talk) with one another to the hint of family drama with Leone, I enjoyed what was said and what wasn't. There was an undertone of "more tha meets the eye" here for me -- seeing two admirals crash a wedding to announce a promotion strikes me as odd.

I really enjoyed Govan the most -- his easy going, confident nature is a great draw and I like his interplay with everyone else. I'm looking forward to seeing more of him.

Reviewer: Gibraltar Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Jan 2015 08:46 Title: Chapter Two

Leone's hurting terribly, and though Colonel Otex's observations regarding her lack of focus may not be especially charitable, they are undoubtedly correct. Letting go, however, is easier said than done.

It is a joy to see so many of Farragut's old crew rising through the ranks and pursuing their own commands (of ships and departments). It's fortunate that so few of their number have fallen during and since the Dominioin War, given the horrific losses of the war and the 'peace' that's followed.

Great chapter.

Reviewer: Gibraltar Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Jan 2015 02:32 Title: Chapter One

Well, good and bad, all wrapped up together.

A wedding that would have been unthinkable a few months earlier, a well-earned promotion... and the realization that Mommy Dearest is now back in uniform.

I appreciate the many facets to this story with multiple generations of the Leone clan, each of them joined in some aspect with the galactic military and political events engulfing the Alpha and Beta Quadrants.

Magnificent story telling!

Reviewer: Gibraltar Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Nov 2014 08:26 Title: Prologue

Well, it wouldn’t be a Leone-involved wedding without drama, would it? 

Good to see things working out happily for Jesse Kincaid and his betrothed, and interesting to witness Starfleet rubbing elbows with LCS military personnel so soon after the treaty with the Maquis.

So many changes are in the works here, with promotions and reassignments, it appears something is definitely on the wind.

More, please!

Reviewer: CeJay Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Oct 2014 13:26 Title: Prologue

It's been a moment since we've seen these characters and clearly a lot has happened since last we saw them. Everybody seems mostly happy with their lots in life and where their careers have taken them even if Leone is clearly still affected by losing Ariel, understandably.

Even the once former traitor Kincaid seems to be almost fully redeemed judging by the turnout to his wedding. The biggest shock to me however is the positively personable Alynna Nechayev. Bet Picard has never seen her like this.

Author's Response:

The story takes place some time after the last chapter of The Chains of Error, where Leone forgives Kincaid for his transgressions in light of Ariel's death.  Although we haven't had a chance to get into it, yet, Alynna Nechayev is very close with the Leone and Apsinall families, as Nechayev, Krystine's mother Angelina, and Greg's mother Joy all served aboard Majestic together when they were all much younger officers.  This is that character in the embrace of family, where she's more comfortable.

Thanks for reading!

-- MDg

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