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Reviewer: M C Pehrson Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Feb 2015 18:28 Title: Chapter 1

What a sad tale. You could not have made the contrast between these two societies any sharper. I can see why the Daranaeans call the afterlife the "place of good smells". Their society stinks.

I do wish that Moralia and her pouchling could have survived and perhaps sought refuge on a more hospitable planet in the Federation, but alas...her conditioning might have made that impossible.

You packed a lot into this small story, and it definitely drew me in.




Reviewer: Lil black dog Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jun 2014 23:35 Title: Chapter 1

I liked this, Bill - not so much the subject matter, quite tragic, that - but the way you so deftly captured the society jespah created.  I found it perfectly believable that with things going to hell in a handbasket around them, Maeppa would still be worried about her social status, and demand to have others cater to her rather than pitch in to save all their lives.

I, too was rooting for Moralia and her pouchling; sorry things ended the way they did, but so glad that she for once, albeit only for a brief time, realized her worth.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing LBD. Yes it was a sad story but I do feel that suit the setting Jespah has created. I'm glad you felt I managed to capture that society.

Reviewer: TemplarSora Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jun 2014 07:04 Title: Chapter 1

That was very dark indeed, but very well done. I was really hoping the Third would manage to survive that attack, but...dang. That was very well done, good job.

Author's Response: Yes it was a dark piece. Thank you for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: kes7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2014 04:43 Title: Chapter 1

That's a pretty dark tale.  I don't know a lot about Jespah's doggy species, but you did a nice job fleshing them out in this brief piece.  I wonder if Maeppa was particularly prideful as a personal failing, or if that's something innate to her whole caste.  

This was very well done.  Good job, Bill!

Author's Response: Yes it was a bit of a dark tale but I feel that the sad truth of Jespah doggy species, however I can recommend finding the time to read the original pieces. I think Maeppa was particularly prideful but if does seem to be a common fault with members of her whole caste from my reading of Jespah original work. As always thanks for reading and your kind feedback.

Reviewer: Miranda Fave Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Jun 2014 02:01 Title: Chapter 1

I thought this a really fitting instalment to jespahs universe. The tragedy of the daranaean society is played out here in tragic circumstances. It really is a case of dog eat dog as the divided society struggles with its ventures into space. Such a caste system society surely cannot survive if it pulls itself apart at the seams in times such as these. Good job!

Author's Response: Thank you MF.

Reviewer: jespah Signed [Report This]
Date: 07 Jun 2014 22:27 Title: Chapter 1

Oh, my (as a Daranaean would say).

I am so, so very pleased. The females of the species are, quite literally, solely valued for cash and carry. All of the Columbia's folks from Take Back the Night are here, too!! I am also so pleased that the encounter was just an aftermath one. This society often turns on itself.

Psst I have a Daranaean story to put on the Archive at some point, taking place later in time. This is a worthy addition to the Emergence and In Between Series, and I thank you for it.

Author's Response: You're most welcome. I so glad this meets with your approval. I'll look forward to your next Daranaean story.

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