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Reviewer: Miranda Fave Signed [Report This]
Date: 14 Jul 2014 01:04 Title: Chapter 2

And at the end we see that indeed, Marshall understands he may be living under his father's shadow whilst in command of the Constitution. Funny how he ends up spilling that out to Hightower. Maybe it is the past connection to her as obviously something was between them. Does his being divorced and their working together now mean a new opportunity for romance? Maybe, maybe not. But it certainly could bring about a host of complications. Or it may be that it serves to make this a doctor/captain relationship that works. She manages to get him to take his medical in a record time after all.

If the introduction of Marshall showed he could be brusque the introduction of our Andorian XO shows he is definitely that. I love how he lays down the law here with the newbies. And cocky navigator slips up on so many fronts. I liked the jogging Ortega linking the first two scenes. I like touches like that. But it also showed an array of different kinds of interactions and we get here in this chapter definite signs that despite the rosy surface all is not sweet on the Constitution and Marshall and others like Hightower and Vrymel will have a lot to prove in their new positions.



Author's Response:

Thank you for the review.  I wanted to show early on that Marshall is vulnerable to a point if nothing else so that he can spend the rest of the story proving himself.  You're right about Marshall's statement to Hightower, next to Vreymal, Hightower is his oldest friend.  As to where their relationship goes, I can't say at this point.

Vreymal was inspired by the character that Louis Gossett Jr. played in An Officer and a Gentlemen, the tough as nails drill sargeant.  It is the exact opposite of Marshall which is why I had to include him, even though his assignment to the Constitution is temporary.  The cocky navigator is there just for that reason, and hopefully in the end he will be humbled.  My goal with this chapter was tp finish introducing all the major players.  You're right everything is not as rosy and sweet, but that is what makes a good story.

Reviewer: CeJay Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jul 2014 16:50 Title: Chapter 2

Ouch, looks like nobody likes psychologists, not even the CMO. Considering the guy should know how to deal with people, he doesn't strike me as being very good at his job.

It's going to be interesting to have Hightower and the captain have history. He claims to be over her but being freshly divorced is an interesting angle. Something could happen there.

Now that the crew has all settled in, I'm eager to see what kind of adventure you have in mind for them.

Author's Response:

Thank you for the review.  Hayes is based on Stupanek from the movie Down Periscope, a dedicated pain in the butt.  He ins't meant to be good at his job.  

There's one detail about the Hightower/Marshall personal relationship that I haven't revealed yet.  It's coming but I can't say what it is at this point.  

Still doing some research at the moment to get the crew where I want them to go.  I may have to take things in a different direction than I originally wanted to, but that's ok.  Looking forward to writing more.

 

Reviewer: jespah Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Jul 2014 02:17 Title: Chapter 2

Much conflict to start! This comfortable ship isn't going to be so comfortable for any slackers for long!



Author's Response:

Thank you for the review.  I didn't want things to be like TNG where everyone gets along right from the start.  I've got the emotional journey planned out for a lot of the characters, and it's going to take conflict for them to grow.  Yes, Vreymal is tough, but he means well.  

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