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Reviewer: Gibraltar Signed [Report This]
Date: 09 Jun 2009 12:44 Title: But She Said "I Love You..."

Holy crap. 

I'd never got the full story on Cass' departure from Earth.  She and her Reman handler couldn't have made that any more painful for Will if they'd tried.  Defecting was bad enough, but making your father beg as you rub his face in it... well, that's woman's got some stones.  I wasn't sure about a soul at this point of the narrative... but hell, stones a'plenty.

Sorry, Will, there's not enough scotch in the universe to dull this pain.  :(

Reviewer: IntrepidSovereign Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Apr 2009 10:48 Title: But She Said "I Love You..."

You really pulled my heartstrings. Man, this is so sad. I really feel for Riker. I hope this works out well in the end...somehow.

Author's Response: Hi IS! Thanks so much for commenting. When Book Three is written, I'll let you know!

Reviewer: Mistral Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Mar 2009 16:31 Title: But She Said "I Love You..."

Wow. Riker as a tragic figure-very different. I liked it, ans the CT format made it work.

Author's Response: Riker ended up being my character of choice and I really like being able to express those "deeper layers" that for some reason I know are there but were never really touched on but for a few episodes of TNG... Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Nerys Ghemor Signed [Report This]
Date: 13 Mar 2009 09:54 Title: But She Said "I Love You..."

Wow...this was very poignant, and I voted this one to be the winner of the challenge.

While I don't know a lot of the background of your story (kind of staying away so I don't accidentally draw influences into the Sigils and Unions universe), I have to say that while it would seem Cassidy is making a horrible choice in tactics as to how she will oppose the UFP...in some odd way it's good to see humans challenge what by the 24th century the UFP had become.  If only she'd picked a better way to do it!!!

As to the story itself, I really felt for Riker in losing his daughter to this sort of double betrayal.  That had to be HORRIBLE, almost as bad as seeing Cassidy die.

BTW, do you have anywhere a complete explanation of the disease that Cassidy has, and the effect that it's had on her?  I've caught glimpses of it in various places, but never a full explanation.  (But then again, I'm compulsive...I actually had to do a full writeup for Gul Berat's condition, that I may end up submitting as a "meta" story.)



Author's Response: Hi Nerys! I'm very glad you enjoyed this. I had a great time developing the genetic condition that afflicts Cassidy. (I'm cruel that way.) I've named it Xenon Syndrome - a well-known, genetic and untreatable affliction uncommonly affecting inter-species' 2nd generation Betazoid children. There is a complete absence of BOTH telepathic/empathic ability AND registry. I surmise the Betazoid community - although they are progressive - still treats those with this condition as if it were a birth defect and since full telepaths cannot sense the afflicted - baseline trust is an issue. It lays the foundation of the domestic grief between Cassidy and Deanna and also lays the foundation that the relationship between Cassidy and her father do not suffer the same ills. I have a draft scene from the beginning of Cassidy's book (not yet finished) that I will be happy to post if it helps pique interest!

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed [Report This]
Date: 25 Feb 2009 14:32 Title: But She Said "I Love You..."

Oh, Teri. What a heartbreaking story. It gives me what I always crave (more about Cassidy), but I bleed for Will -- as a parent, I can't even fathom how heartbreaking that had to be for him, to see his daughter slip away, even if he holds some responsibility for not really getting involved sooner and listening.

Heartbreaking and beautifully done.

Author's Response: Thanks Steff. I wrote the "real" scene (for book three) almost a year ago (in third person of course.) Rob's challenge gave me the perfect venue for Riker to talk to someone - who WASN'T family - and let him verbalize what happened that night. I was a good scene for me to re-visit and chew on once more because now the "real" scene will have some changes made that will really help the whole story! Thanks for the feedback!

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