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Date: 28 Aug 2013 10:01 Title: Chapter 6

So there's more to it.

They did something to him!

Something that made him (I'm talking about Kirk here) survive. And possibly improved him. But ... eek ....

A great sense of foreboding here and also some wonder, as to who the hell these people really are. 

More, s'il vous plait!



Author's Response: Thank you! And there is a fair bit more here, should you be so inclined. (And maybe some more when I figure the rest of it out.)

Author's Response: Thank you! And there is a fair bit more
here, should you be so inclined. (And maybe some more when I figure the rest of it out.)

Reviewer: jespah Signed [Report This]
Date: 28 Aug 2013 09:57 Title: Chapter 5

Uh, oh.

Well, our Pilot has a sense of such things. The head surveyor and the captain are at odds, and the captain, it seems, is serving at the deference to (and perhaps the reluctant pleasure of) the head surveyor.

I love how the aliens are barely shown; it's really just a shadow of them and I think that's how it should be at this stage. Otherwise, you're like a fan dancer who drops all her fans in 2 seconds. 

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Date: 28 Aug 2013 09:38 Title: Chapter 4

The plot thickens!

Smart to hang back, and check, just in case, you can't be sure. I like when technology is imperfect and the results have to be teased out. I feel it works so much better than when everything just, constantly, operates flawlessly (which makes me wonder why people are being sent out in the first place).

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Date: 28 Aug 2013 09:34 Title: Chapter 3

Very alien, but still very relatable.

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Date: 28 Aug 2013 09:33 Title: Chapter 2

A lovely picture of Uhura listening, listening, listening. This is the impression I always had of her (and of Hoshi, too, for that matter), that they were listening to things that the rest of us just dismiss as background noise, and that those mysterious whispers mean something. I feel you captured her well.

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Date: 28 Aug 2013 09:31 Title: Chapter 1

I love the mystical ending of this - salvation or destruction?

Well done.

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