Date: 19 Jul 2013 02:29 Title: Chapter 4
A really impressive self-contained story. When we got the characters all in play here in the AOS setting they all fitted their onscreen characterisations and I heard their voices. Very well done on that front. Also, a very good story, pared down to the essential material required to tell it and yet give it flavour.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the welcome and reviews! I had originally done this very differently (and much longer) and then decided it worked much better--if was running the risk of being confusing--by strictly limiting the POV. I hadn't even thought of the Robocop comparison but as that's one of my absolute favorite movies, thank you. I was concerned about the confusion factor, particularly given how long the real payoff is, so I'm glad to see it didn't dissuade from the rest.