Date: 28 May 2014 18:22 Title: Chapter 1
Hee, hee. That was fun. It was a delight to read happy Hank and Bethany. Ad the courting, flirting, playful nature of this despite the fact it is a time when they are long together. I guess that adds to their longevity if they keep things as fresh as this and 'exercise' so much. I wondered at the start if Bethany was about to realise she was pregnant or in denial about it or something but instead it's an ordinary everyday relationship scene - albeit one fraught with the potential for a diplomatic disaster if Hank had said the wrong thing. However, Hank (like his author) can all too often pull it out of the bag with a winning line.
Date: 16 Jul 2013 20:57 Title: Chapter 1
Dead. Dead of cute. You were always really good at dialogue, and you still are -- your ability to write normal people having normal conversations and still somehow making them engaging. You'd think we get enough talking in real life, but then a good story comes along and a good writer takes what is a perfectly mundane talk between characters and makes it engaging and charming. It's a rare talent, Zach, and you've got it.
I love just about everything here. Bethany's comment on how they have to maintain the peace was terrific. And Hank's sincerity and sweetness makes my heart ache, in the good way.
The compliments, they flatter me. This was an interesting piece to write as it was never meant to get as playful as it did, but this just shows the evolution of the H/B dynamic. If this conversation had occured before they began dating, before they really knew what the other felt, it would have had a completely different feel about it. Instead, we get this, and it turned out to be quite fun to write and later read once more. Thanks for the review :)