Date: 28 May 2013 20:43 Title: Veridian III, 2371
Simply beautiful piece Mac. After reading the ficlet piece about the crash this is a wonderful follow up for me. Serendipity to read them that way. Beverly's insights and feelings are nice. I like how you use Ogawa at the beginning using a canon minor as opposed to Deanna who you would imagine would be eslewhere.
It is nice to have a little sense of what may have happened afterwards, after the crash and between seeing the rescuers come and leave the planet. Simply done we get small pictures that give the sense of the work being done.
Also then seeing how the loss of the ship is going to a hard hit on them all. We see it first with Geordi here and in the movies between Picard and Riker. Perhaps Picard for all his attachment had his Stargazer to fall in love with but for the likes of Riker, Geordi and Crusher the D is the one they fell in love with. Beverly admitting that it originally did not do it for her but the ship grew on her, after all it was the place she called home and raised for a time her son, made friends and retouched with Picard. So of course, this ship would come to mean something for her.
Very nicely written and creates a fantastic insight to the story of Crusher.
Author's Response: You're most kind. I took the opening from a deleted scene from Generations that featured Ogawa and Crusher, the dialogue is more or less taken from that. The rest is conjecture. The only book I ever knew that tackled post-crash was Shatner's Return. As you say this was their ship, Riker's on down. That scene in Way of the Warrior when Worf and O'Brien muse on the ENT-D sums it up. Stands to reason that Beverly, despite being a doctor -someone whose interest is people then ships- cares for her home. bless you for your words and my thanks
Date: 26 May 2013 10:44 Title: Veridian III, 2371
Again, a great glimpse into the aftermath of this key event, nicely portrayed through the eyes of Doctor Crusher. I especially liked her moment with LaForge, who must have been feeling soo guilty right about then. Good stuff!
Author's Response: thanks. If a captain cares for his ship than a chief engineer moreso. Oddly I'm thinking of the Chief in Das Boot but there you go :)
Date: 25 May 2013 06:28 Title: Veridian III, 2371
There would be another ship named Enterprise as there had been since the time Benedict Arnold captured the George in 1773 at Quebec. But this had been her Enterprise.
Perfect. Simply perfect, for everyone we've seen lose an Enterprise all the way through the series, and here, for Beverly.
Date: 25 May 2013 01:36 Title: Veridian III, 2371
Ah yes - the ship feels real, like another living being. But Bev is right; better for Geordi to have gotten the kids out than lamenting over not saving the ship.
Author's Response: Indeed. Geordi (and Farrell) were in the right place at the right time. As for the ship...much more than that collection of nuts and bolts.