Date: 28 May 2013 12:59 Title: Orbit, 2371
An excellent piece Mac. The sense of danger and urgency is palpable. The ship trembles and screams as it goes down. Beverly has to be panicked, frightened as to what is going to happen, whether they will survive, has to worry for her colleagues, her patients and her friends too - those working on the bridge to try and rescue a situation, who have had to make this mad gamble to try and survive, to make this desperate call and among it all she knows that Picard is not there, that he should be that she probably worries for him too and yet
...and yet despite everything, she has to be focused, to be assuring, a leader, an example, to get her patients and charges to safety, to flee her medical bay which has always been her sanctuary, her place of expertise, her place of work and certainty, and it is being abandoned, is to explode and she has to scramble everyone to some safe spot in the saucer section. So much to try and convey, so much that has to be in her mind and your piece works so well as to get me thinking about Beverly's perspective, to apprise her in continuous new light, to see her as more than the mere few glimpses we do get and see there's so much more there under the surface. Super ficlet piece and sums up the perfectly brilliant job you have done throughout to illuminate and cast new light, new fondness and affection for a character who never quite did it for me first time round but who I now see through new eyes thanks to your stories.
Date: 26 May 2013 09:44 Title: Orbit, 2371
This was heart-pounding, Mac. You really captured the urgency, the need to get everyone to safety, and to protect the children and injured as the saucer section plunged out of control to the surface of Veridian III.
I imagine it would be just like that. Others are responsible for piloting the ship, ensuring that the landing is as safe and soft as it can possibly be. And as CMO, Beverly's responsibility would be for the people contained within. Very, very nice.
Date: 24 May 2013 15:42 Title: Orbit, 2371
Wow, that was intense! Well-written, too. Space battles are always a challenge to write, and the lower decks perspective even moreso. Well done!
Author's Response: thanks, some say I do the space battles more than most but I've always been taken by them, and lower decks. You tend to forget there's other people on a ship sometimes beyond those on the bridge :)