Date: 24 Jul 2021 06:23 Title: Chapter 10
As Douglas Adams observed, the primary problem with time travel is grammar - particularly verb tense... "may have come to fruition before our arrival..." That's also the most fun thing about writing time travel stories.
The only thing better than a mad scientist is a mutating, dying mad scientist...
This Baron is a formidable foe. Good cliffhanger action - and no shortage of bloody action on the bridge.
Yes, time travel tenses are hard! ;-) Thank you for your comments!
Date: 02 May 2011 00:44 Title: Chapter 10
Ah, MIT graduates still up to no good...even in the 24th century! I'd be a little apprehensive of anyone with dual doctorates in quantum mechanics and dimensional theory. Keep that guy in the classroom.
And the action really picks up in this chapter...poor Ensign Qawasimi!
Dr. Benghazi is something of an enigma, only one of many associated with this mission. However, I think the crew would agree with your assessment. :D
The Orions were not pulling any punches, to be sure. Ensign Qawasimi and the others killed and injured in the attack deserved better. Here's hoping there's some payback waiting for them in the wings.
Thank you for the review!
Date: 12 Jan 2010 11:50 Title: Chapter 10
Oh. My. God. How intense was this?!
Again, hugely impressed by your writing skill, you really painted a dark, gritty picture of this attack and its aftermath. The killing of Qawasami and Weatherly was brutal, real brutal.
One of the other things I noted and thought was really well done was the captain's little joke about no pressure and the fact that it fell completely flat - I thought that was really realistically portrayed.
Best. Chapter. Yet!
Many thanks. I've occasionally worried that the bridge attack scene here was a bit too graphic, but I really wanted to portray the brutality of the enemy the crew is facing. I'm glad to know it came across well.
Date: 19 Dec 2009 06:11 Title: Chapter 10
Damn...brutal and quick, this mission has turned from weird to deadly in a heartbeat. Top notch stuff.
The Orions aren't known for their subtlety or their mercy, as the crew of the Gibraltar has discovered. Thanks for the kind words. :-)
Date: 12 Aug 2009 06:04 Title: Chapter 10
Lightner wanted action. "Beware what you wish for" certainly applies here! The mystery deepens. I'm really liking the pacing of this and the economy of words. You have a very tight story going on here.
Much obliged. :) When I was writing it I agonized over whether I had too many plot threads going, but it ended up coming together rather well for me at the end.