Date: 19 Oct 2014 23:32 Title: Chapter 4
Ah, Orions. Too gripped by their own desires for "valor" and combat "prowess" to let common sense take hold. Then again, it makes sense in a way based on what we know of animal women. Their women are so enticing because most lack the tactfulness and common sense to be long of this world.
I like Sandhurst's continued adjustment periods: dealing with a slower, older ship, trying not to step on toes, pretending to be confidant when he doesn't exactly feel that way.
Date: 25 Jun 2012 17:59 Title: Chapter 4
Ashok's in deep doo; the ship only managed warp 8.3...
Nice use of those Son'a subspacial weapons. Plus Kutav is shaping up into a nice little villain, Orion as well... There's something you don't see every day.
Kutav's less a full-fledged villain than an opportunist whose got a strong sense of which way the wind is blowing at any given moment. I'm glad you like the character, as he's always been a favorite of mine.
Date: 31 Oct 2010 11:53 Title: Chapter 4
The action has really picked up here. I like how you peppered over the chapter the thoughts of this intelligent 'being' that's floating around in space and ready to cause some trouble. You'll excuse me (until we get into more detailed descriptions) if I think of this being as Melllvar, the 34-year old gas cloud that tortures the old Star Trek crew from Futurama:)
Well, I'm hoping this being is a tad bit more malevolent than a overly-enthusiastic non-corporeal Star Trek fan! ;-) Thanks for the review!
Date: 21 Dec 2009 04:38 Title: Chapter 4
A great action packed chapter here. I am constantly amazed at how much you manage to fit into one chapter. Things that a lot of the time other writers (and I include myself in this) would spread out over two or three goes into one, and yet it never seems rushed.
An interesting situation you have created, and I am intrigued as to what is actually going on on Pierosh.
Many thanks for the kind review. I'm pleased the pacing doesn't come across as rushed. :-)