Date: 04 Jan 2013 19:28 Title: Chapter 1
This was a good chapter, but in places it was weighed down by obvious mistakes and typos in the writing. Sometimes it became rather confusing what was going on as names seemed to change or even the captain's gender! You've definitely got a good plot but these mistakes detract from the whole.
Thank you for the feedback. The issues you have identified have since been corrected. It is no longer an issue going forward,