Date: 12 Dec 2012 16:42 Title: Chapter 2
I like that the humans' initial champion was female, although it's rather convenient that she was skilled in fighting (e. g. what does a Kathryn Janeway do?).
A lot of exposition had to go into this chapter. The story line is a good one; not so sure about all of the expository paragraphs. I tend to tell with characters talking, perhaps someone telling a story or introducing themselves? Hard to say what's best.