Date: 15 Oct 2010 02:33 Title: Chapter Ten
It was disturbing to read how Speros killed in cold blood those Cardassians, but when I reached the point when Macet's group discovers Vergal's betrayal my first thought was "where is Speros when you need him?"
Berat not only had to make a difficult choice at Septimus III, he knows he might have to face it again. Never-ending sacrifice of one's aching heart.
Iymender clearly is not a warrior, but I'm sure the "pocket gul" could take all "three" Duras Sisters with her bare hands.
A good chapter. Not everything goes as planned, just like in the real life.
Speros' actions were disturbing for me to write as well. I do think he went too far...my writing it isn't an endorsement of what he did. He represents one extreme--the Federation represents the other extreme, and neither one works.
As to the betrayal--thank goodness these Cardassians weren't accustomed to dealing with other species' hearing!
And yes...Berat knows that if the mission fails, he will have to abandon everybody on the ground and that he will be the commander of the entire force.
As for Rebek, I'm sure that her small size means there is a point where she would be outmatched in hand-to-hand combat. Her skill with a weapon means that getting that close to her is NOT easy, though.
As for Iymender, you are SO right. He is not a warrior, and though he tried, and I know he had to go through the same training everyone else did, I think it was probably a struggle for him and I imagine that he just barely passed his physical training requirements. But the Guard accepted him because his programming skill was one that the state needed.
Date: 15 Dec 2009 14:24 Title: Chapter Ten
Okay, I had been getting Iymender's name wrong. ;)
Ocett thinks Rebek is too girly? Hey, if she carries around a sniper rifle and knows how to use it, she's free to be as girly as she wants to be! :D
LOL, what were you thinking it was? ;-)
And yeah, Rebek IS really very feminine in her behavior by Cardassian standards. Badass when necessary, but very girly. Small, little voice, interested in experimenting with her looks, curious, mechanically-inclined...all of those are feminine traits for a Cardassian. Tinkering with machines in her off-time is VERY feminine, as is the fact that when something goes wrong in her quarters, mechanically, half the time she's likely to go tearing into it herself instead of calling maintenance. I suspect she has a toolkit stashed away somewhere so Maintenance--or Va'Kust--can't get it away from her. ;-)
Date: 15 Oct 2009 12:11 Title: Chapter Ten
LOL, Rebek and Ocett's rivalry is very amusing in its volatility! Duras sister #3! HEHEHEH!
Ouch! Poor Iymender!
How is his name pronounced btw? I-mender or EE-mender?
*biting nails* I hope this ends well!
Glad you like it! What's even more ironic is that we've heard Ocett's feelings about Klingons, in TNG "The Chase"... ;-)
And it's the second pronunciation--EE-mender.
Date: 29 Mar 2009 11:51 Title: Chapter Ten
Another breath-taking installment. The battle scenes are picking up a bit, and there's plenty of tension and intrigue to keep the pace up. Macet and Berat are both wonderful as always.
I suppose the biggest thing I might have some... well, not issue with. That would be the wrong word. But the idealism of the Federation in trying to preserve life and avoid cruelty seems to not get the fairest shake here. Not that I believe it's a perfect system -- you know me, I'm more'n willing to dive into the dark side of that society -- but the kind of derision is seems to face from Spirodopoulos is a bit disturbing. Certainly there's nothing wrong with the IDEAL of preserving life and avoiding cruelties, but it seems more like he's shunning the ideal overall instead of thinking more of a realistic compromise.
Then again, on the field of battle there tends to be a lot of absolutes. I wasn't too surprised by the Cardassians finding the terrans to be too naive (again not always a bad quality, as with all things, moderation is a key), though -- it's true that by that century, they may be a bit too naive. Of course, after the way, doubtless that changes.
As always, a thought-provoking and interesting part.
Before I get started...I want to say that I definitely intended that scene to jar people. I wanted Speros' act to catch people off guard. And yes, there is some real cynicism in Spirodopoulos. Understand that he would not have gone as far as Speros had he had control of the situation--but he had to react VERY quickly to his first blush on the situation and find a way to do so without breaking the alliance or causing his own people to turn against him.
Things are moving at a pace, though, where there's a lot less time for nuance than there was before. I'll send a detailed explanation of that over at TrekBBS.
The Cardassian view that humanity is too naive is established in the series. Remember Garak's reason for being disappointed in Julius Caesar? He found it naive to the point of childishness and buffoonery that Caesar never saw the betrayal coming, but says that Cardassians spot it right off in Act 1.
Date: 29 Mar 2009 06:05 Title: Chapter Ten
Another tense segment. When something goes right something else seems to go wrong.
Again, the scenes with Macet and Berat in them make for the most compelling and engrossing. I think it is a measure of the depth of character you have created for each of these fascinating characters. They are so Cardassian and at times then because the world you have created is so rich and varied they seem to eskew the Cardassian stereotype. But then that's the beauty of this story and world, it becomes clear there is no real stereotype and that the characters are all different and unique.
The story moves forward even as we learn more about Cardassian servitude and loyalty to their state. Berat allows the Dominion to come ever closer knowing it might very well spell disaster for the plan but to act otherwise would betray the plan. You made a Cardassian virtue a plot device to rack up the tension. Great work.
Thanks...it really makes me feel good to know you're seeing my Cardassian characters as multifaceted men and women. The uniqueness in the Cardassians is--to me--something that was established in them right from the start, and I feel that approaching them as a one-dimensional stereotype does them a real disservice.
To treat them as though their system turns out nothing but unfeeling killers--or to take it one further and act as though the only way to redeem them would be to destroy everything recognizably Cardassian about them--wouldn't be right. To go that far, to turn them into Federation clones, would be like saying that there is nothing worthwhile in them at all. You might as well let the Dominion finish what it started if that were the case. And I just don't think it is.
I'm glad you like it!