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Reviewer: Gul Rejal Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 21 Oct 2010 03:07 Title: Chapter Sixteen

I dreaded reading this chapter again because I knew it would squeeze the last tear out of my eyes; and it started right with the first part and Rashad who felt guilty because loss of Prashek was heavier for him than loss of Ngaer. While his suffering, mixed with guilt and fear of his own feeling is sad, I am glad to see that he can see beyond genetics and political empires. Prashek was a person for him, not only a Cardassian or a (former) enemy, he was a person who he could connect with and go fishing.

"Bow deep, that way you won’t be as far from the ground when the gul slaps you down" - precious advice, I shall remember that :)

I actually agree with Speros - in a way. The tradition of not showing Cardassian dead to aliens was maybe obsolete and lost its practical meaning long ago, but it was a tradition and one that didn't harm anyone. So why to break with it, if it doesn't bring any harm and especially if breaking it could make many traditionalists unhappy. Some traditions don't have to be abandoned only because they don't make sense any more.

I love that the Cardassians appreciated Ngaer's sacrifice even though she was not a Cardassian. I googled what a rahnoavis looked like and it was one beautiful animal.

The ceremony was very touching. Speros behaved, Folani lost her aggression - even they felt it was a special, important and sad moment when their differences had no meaning and would be out of place. A great although truly mournful chapter.



Author's Response:

I did not agree with Speros.  The tradition once came from a necessary instinct of their ancestors.  But now, it is a reminder of how "superior" Cardassians are to other races.  I think in that sense, it may not harm anyone directly, but it DOES foster racism.  As such, it is a symptom of sickness and should be addressed in that manner.

As for Rashad...guilt is a common feeling after a loss like that, when people find that they are grieving in some way that they don't think is "the right way."  In this case it had a political dimension as well.

I'm glad you felt the ceremony worked.  I am not sure all of the Cardassians would have appreciated Ngaer's sacrifice, but Daro convinced the guls that it was a good idea.  Speros had to be talked into it, and I think that had Daro and Macet not been pushing for it, it wouldn't have happened.

Reviewer: Miranda Fave Signed [Report This]
Date: 24 Jul 2010 16:22 Title: Chapter Sixteen

This from a young ensign: I kind of got the feeling that if he hadn’t been Cardassian, if things had gone differently, he’s the kind of guy I would’ve liked to take fishing. This just feels kind of messed-up. Backwards—I mean, until just recently, we were POWs. Is the strongest sign of how the two sides are coming together in a mutual way. A sign of respect and even growing friendship.

Onwards to the honour guard and the naming of the ship as Zerayd. That was a really well thought out and detailed ceremony with a great deal of emotion carried through it. The element of honour very clear to every little nuance. A very good job Nerys and quite an honorific by all to include so many in the ceremony.

It is especially nice that the Cardassians like Daro noted the more reflective reactions of the Federation crew. I don't share the idea that Starfleet or the Federation are as anti religion and doubt there would be such regulations given the liberal, pluralistic ideals of the Federation.  [I  do accept a strong secular element within Starfleet as seen in various guises in canon.] But it for one thing makes for great story telling here and adds a further layer to proceedings as well as offering common ground for some of the characters of both sides.

Now, we look forward to the crew working together and what their next plan of attack is going to be. This is a ragtag fleet as you ahve called them and they are going to be at a disadvantage from their numbers and from having to have two different parties working together. But perhaps from that diversity will come a strength in itself.



Author's Response:

Thank you for the review...I was beginning to think this story got lost over here!

I'm very glad you liked the ceremony--I appreciate your picking up on different parts of the chapter, though! :-)

While the regulations on the Federation side are certainly nowhere near as stringent as in the Cardassian Union (where you are executed if caught practicing religion), I'm glad you see the "mirroring" of the Federation and the Union.  Though I would prefer to discuss the details in private, I do think there is enough precedent both in Trek history and IRL to suspect this as at least a possible outcome in the 24th century we see on Trek.  Though someday I MIGHT write Spirodopoulos' arrival at Starfleet Academy...it's becoming pretty clear to me he would experience a real culture shock on his own planet if not clashes with some of his professors.

I'm still trying to work on what exactly comes next...it'll take me some brainstorming to determine what makes sense!

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