Date: 17 Oct 2010 04:23 Title: Chapter Fourteen
His hand maybe not as dextrous as they used to be, but his mind works with the famous Cardassian efficiency, which even a Jem'Hadar cannot not appreciate. Go, Gul Berat! :D
Gul Macet had to execute a difficult protocol and proved strength of his character by not forcing that on Spirodopoulos, or any other non-Cardassian. A very sad moment. Hiding it behind military talk, article numbers and bureaucracy didn't diminish the heaviness of the task. But the sacrifice for the Union goes before everything.
Anyone who underestimates Gul Berat is going to get "taken to school" in a BIG way.
As for the Jem'Hadar, even with all of their programming, it sometimes seemed like they had a bit more in the way of personal honor than the Vorta. So I felt like Volet'aval would notice Berat's skills.
As for what Macet did...that was one of the hardest things I had to write in this story so far. It was even harder than writing Gul Speros mowing down all those prisoners. You can bet he DOES feel the heaviness of his task. And the other thing I did that I realize could be controversial...Article 58 is real--or at least it was real, and it was used in the real world to "justify" the same kinds of things that the Cardassian Union did to its people and others. Having a person like Macet actually use Article 58 to deliver his sentence was HARD. But I think that's the Cardassian mind: he felt like an awful tool to use, but it was the only one he felt was available to him, until a day when something else replaces it.
Date: 19 Dec 2009 17:20 Title: Chapter Fourteen
Caw blimey! It's over and right enough when they reach the nebula what then? a brutal battle and brilliantly realised throughout and brought to a climatic end with a brutal underlining as the forces turn on the planet and eradicate all that is left. The Cardassian ways certainly are no the Federation ways. But coldly it does make sense and I imagine it really pain Macet and Berat to take this action.
Wonderful combat scene - brilliantly conveyed and more wonderful too for the technical details would read right and the view through the engineering eyes of Berat. Exceedingly well crafted moves and actions and fitting descriptions to go with and all grounded in Berat's engineering knowledge and of course in a very Cardassian way.
And still we have Mike taking the guns and giving us a human insight into the Cardassian way of things. Brilliantly done Nerys.
Well, we'll have to see what happens! :-D
Anyway, I'm really glad you liked it. The ending was a very tough decision for me as the writer, as well as for Macet. As IntrepidSovereign pointed out, destruction of resources when you pull out of an area is very much Cardassian SOP (as we saw with the withdrawal from Bajor). That said, though, this is a very different bunch who are doing it, and I know they're not just doing it for the hell of it. And they are not happy with the loss of lives, either, even though they believe it must be done.
I am also glad to know you liked the technical stuff! I figured an engineer in battle was going to be seeing things from that standpoint--that's why he uses the Cardassian equivalent of the kind of tactical screen we saw in "The Wounded," and other schematics and statistics, while in battle, rather than the direct visual on the viewscreen like a lot of commanders use. It's not to distance himself from what he's doing--rather, he SEES better that way.
BTW, with Berat, I think you really get a chance to see how differently even a laid-back Cardassian crew operates than a Starfleet one, and you can see where Berat's unease with Nance's command style and on a few occasions with others of the Starfleet members in the RR came from, and why he reacted the way he did to those things.
Date: 18 Dec 2009 12:20 Title: Chapter Fourteen
The McAllister C-5 Nebula? Near Minos Korva? That brings back some memories. (I watched "Chain of Command" a few days ago. ;) )
Destroying assets before leaving is Cardassian SOP, but I like that Macet didn't force the Starfleet personnel to be part of it. Yes, they could have given the survivors time to change side, but time was something the TO doesn't have, plus you had no idea if those who appeared to change sides would still be plotting against you. Human in me says give them one more chance; Cardassian in me says it has to be done.
So now we go hiding in a nebula...
Yep, that nebula--though I tend to think of it as the Kounamab. ;-)
And wow, you REALLY caught Macet's thought process, in the decision that he made, and why he did it. That wasn't easy for him, and it sure as hell wasn't easy for me to write.
I would say that when he initially asked Spirodopoulos to fire on the base, he simply wasn't thinking. When he saw the look on Spirodopoulos' face and heard what he felt about it, I can tell you that Macet genuinely felt bad--and not just because forcing the Starfleet personnel to participate would've undermined the alliance.