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Reviewer: Gul Rejal Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 16 Oct 2010 21:02 Title: Chapter Twelve

I love the idea of the sign language. It makes perfect sense on a battlefield: soldiers can communicate without fear of being overheard by their enemy.

And this was fast paced chapter for sure! Things happening so fast and so many at the same time; great risks taken with only hope of success. The Thirteenth Order is going to lose many good people, too many, but they know their sacrifices are necessary for greater cause.


Author's Response:

I also thought that a species that doesn't hear as well as humans might see sign language differently, too.  But what Macet allowed them to see is not something ordinarily shown to outsiders in this universe.

This part of the battle was a real experiment for me, with so many different things going on.  I'm glad you liked it. :-)

Reviewer: IntrepidSovereign Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Dec 2009 19:24 Title: Chapter Twelve

"Defective"? Is that what some snooty Vorta said about Berat? Um...that Vorta assumed room temperature, right? :D

Anyway, great space battle!

Author's Response:

That Vorta is currently held in cold storage--i.e. he's on an ice block right now.  Not dead YET.  But could be headed that way after the war.  Either that or a niiiiiice, long interrogation.

Glad you like the battle!

Reviewer: Lady Drace Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Oct 2009 13:16 Title: Chapter Twelve

Space battle! Wooo! I'm positively buzzing with excitement!

Brave Iymender! That ankle has GOT to hurt!

Woo! Sneaky Berat! That's one hell of a trick!

GAH! Why isn't this finished?? You're killing me. Just killing me!

Author's Response:

There should hopefully be a new chapter up soon. :-)  But this is gonna be a looooong story, it seems!

I'm actually writing stuff for Chapters 15 and 16 now, so I'm actually ahead of what I'm posting.

And yes, Berat's a really sly one if you're an enemy of his!  Anyone who counts him out because of his disability is in for the technical ass-kicking of their life!!! :-D

Reviewer: Miranda Fave Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Aug 2009 06:13 Title: Chapter Twelve

Macet certainly can be intense, certainly he is very driven and determined - in mauch like his cousin - only Macet has better judgement and makes better calls on what moral side to come down on. The tensions and betrayals seen in that segment will serve to show the strife that will endure in Cardassai after the Dominion War. Those who opposed it and did something to throw off the yoke of the Dominion and those who did nothing, with those who actively supported the Dominion up until the last days. It is actually forboding as to the future integrity and strength of Cardassian Union. For a culture so determined by the state and loyalty to it, the Dominion War and alliance and that befell the power because of it will sow long lasting discord and strife.
Wow. Berat sure does throw a hard six! That was quite elaborate in a way, certainly carrying off the writing process of it is somehting else. But I liked the tension Berat feels welling up inside himself awaiting the execution order and his skin physically tingling with the nerves. Nice atmosphere heading into what is quite a gambit.
I agree that his engineering knowledge allows him to risk lots of different things and approach things in a different manner than other Guls. Terrific stuff. Edgy and dramatic. Well done Nerys. I had to have my fingers crossed for Berat. Then the reveal of the plan and the high cost it involves. An awesome move, brave, bold and almost reckless. But it was going to take such a move in order to get past the superior Dominion forces. But whilst the forces might be superior in numbers and/or strength. They do not have the cunning of those who came up with this plan. Very audacious. I'm reminded of nuBSG when Adama plummets Galactica into the atmosphere of New Caprica. However, this very much had its own trek feel and very Cardassian in execution. Plus BSG didn't have the difficulties and concerns of what damage jumping into full impulse within an atmosphere might cause to contend with. Nor did it use that disruption to its advantage to clear fighters and shuttles off the surface. A great diversionary tactic. Berat might wince to know this, but my McGregor would be very proud of that move. Great stuff Nerys.

Author's Response:

There are a LOT of different elements that could feed into the future of the Cardassian Union, and yes--this is already one possible fracture.

Macet, indeed, can be very determined--but like I said, that harsher part of him feels like an ill-fitting mask to him.

And about Berat--yes, he DOES take some major risks, that's for sure!  (That'll show the Jem'Hadar and Vorta to call him "defective"...those a-holes!)

I was inspired by the storming of New Caprica, yes.  But I'm glad it still feels very distinct to you--that was a real concern of mine considering I had such a direct inspiration for Berat's maneuver.  Thanks very much for your feedback! :-)

Reviewer: kes7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 Aug 2009 05:10 Title: Chapter Twelve

Wow, that was intense!  Keep it coming!

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading! :-)

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