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Reviewer: RobertScorpio Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Jan 2012 17:56 Title: Chapter 2

You have the arrogant Vulcan's down to the letter! And what are those pesky Cardassians up to now? Great segment, keep 'em coming...


Author's Response: Thanks for the review. We've only seen Solok one time in "Take Me Out to the Holosuite" and he seemed so arrogant that I actually found him pretty easy to write when setting up Stavek. You'll have to wait and see on the Cardassians.

Reviewer: Ln X Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Jan 2012 23:43 Title: Chapter 2

Wow! Even though that was a lot of introductory material you kept it really interesting by what I think is a very clever use of conflict, current and future. I particularly enjoyed Elena Ortega being seperated from her husband; she will be pretty narked off with Knight due to this!

There's this hint of trouble with the Cardassians... That was a nice way to end the chapter, and with most of the crew pieces in place, the plot can begin... Keep up the good (and gripping) work!

One last thing; I can't put my finger on it, but something about your writing draws the reader in (despite some of the small mistakes and errors in the prose). Maybe you've got the writer's gene...

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. My goal with this chapter was to introduce more of the crew, but for it to flow from one to the other. Rather than give each one an individual segment I wanted to see if I couldn't put them together in a way that would lead into the big, ongoing plot, but at the same time give each character their own moment, I know there's a few mistakes, and I do apologize for that. Hopefully, it should not distract from the plot. Hope you keep reading.

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